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Lyrical Challenge 2.0

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Started: 2/8/2011 Category: Entertainment
Updated: 6 years ago Status: Post Voting Period
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BlackVoid

Pro

I've seen several rap battles and lyrical challenges and the like on this site, and while I do enjoy reading them, the problem I had was that I couldn't figure out the rhythm of the lyrics. That was the inspiration for this.

In this challenge, we will take turns assigning each other songs, and we will switch the lyrics to the song with our own, maintaining the same rhythm and rhyme scheme.

Rules:

1. The song we assign must be popular. The point of this challenge is so that the viewers can know the rhythm. So when choosing a song, it should be one that your average person would know. Ex: Lady Gaga, Nickelback, Ke$ha, whatever, as long as we know the song. Preferably one that is in the current times.

2. The new lyrics must fit the rhythm of the original song, and keep the same rhyme scheme. The rhymes do not have to be the exact syllable as the original though.

3. We will maintain choruses; the verses we make for the chorus will repeat in the same spots the original chorus does.

4. Post a link to your song anyway, just in case a viewer doesn't know the rhythm but wants to.

5. Con will give intros and give me a song in his/her first round, I will "lyricate" it and give con a song in round 2. He will lyricate his to finish round 2.

6. In round three we spice it up a bit. In addition to con assigning me a song to end round 2, they must also give a theme to base the lyrics around. Ex: Sci-Fi, Adventure, Romance, etc. I then do the same to con.

7. Round four is the most fun. After giving his themed lyrics in round three, we will assign each other another song with both a theme and a general story we must follow in our lyrics. The story can be either serious or crazy. Ex: You will rewrite the lyrics to Tik Tok with a romance theme about a donkey who falls in love with a cat. Or something like that.

8. When assigning a theme and song, the 2 must match. What I mean by this is that if you want me to write sad or depressing lyrics, dont match me with death metal or some lighning fast rock song.


Judges can vote on a few things. Who's rhythm was more smooth/true to the original, who's lyrics made more sense, who's lyrics were more interesting or entertaining to read, etc. But please give a RFD.

If a potential opponent has any questions whatsoever, please ask in comments before accepting. I'm sure I forgot to go over something in the rules.

Good luck.
4stFire

Con

I look forward to this debate

Your song will be Firework by Katy Perry
Good luck!
Debate Round No. 1
BlackVoid

Pro

Alright, sorry about getting this up so late. Procrastinated a bit too much, but I'll do better next time. In any case, I decided to maintain the sad -> uplifting tone. I hope I made the story-shift clear enough.

Katy Perry - Firework


Verse 1:

I could never feel
Like I did back then
Too much pain for me
I could no longer bend

After my last died
Was so full of strife
I had no one left
"Time to take my life"

Opened the window
In my 4th story room
Getting ready to go jump for my impending doom

Then I saw the cars
Lined up in a row
In my group of four

And they're going the same old path
In unision
But then, the last
Broke away, and turned left

Chorus:

And baby then I saw the light
I dont have to have this plight
Though they died a-flame, flame, flame
I dont have to be the same, same, same

Baby then i saw the light
I dont have to have this plight
Though they died a-flame, flame, flame,
I dont have to do the same, same, same

Verse 2:


I had realized
It was not the end
I could be a change
Be the one to bend

So I took my life
A new direction
Decided to build up
And become stronger

And I would need to be
For what lied ahead
Cause I was determined
To be the one to end their dread

I was now ready
For the path I chose
So I took the hose

And we all stormed inside, the house
The fire, we doused
And I realized
Fighting fires is my life

Chorus 2:

Baby then i saw the light
I dont have to have this plight
Though they died a-flame, flame, flame,
I dont have to do the same, same, same

Baby then i saw the light
I dont have to have this plight
Though they died a-flame, flame, flame,
I dont have to do the same, same, same

Post chorus:


Splash, splash, splash
As the fire turns to ash, ash, ash
I throw my heartache in the trash, trash, trash
And realize my past I can bash, bash, bash

Chorus 3:

Baby then i saw the light
I dont have to have this plight
Though they died a-flame, flame, flame,
I dont have to do the same, same, same

Baby then i saw the light
I dont have to have this plight
Though they died a-flame, flame, flame,
I dont have to do the same, same, same

Fin




Whew. Hope that didnt come off as too cheesy.

And thanks for accepting. Your song will be Hey, Soul Sister by Train. I would post a link, but it defaults the video to the top of the post, which is distracting. But I'm pretty sure we've all heard it so it should be alright.



4stFire

Con

Alright I'm going to keep with the original upbeat tone...
(Because my opponent did not keep the original chorus, I will assume that it no longer a rule for this post)

This songs a hard one to follow so keep in mind the crazy rhyme scheme of Soul Sister (perhaps listen to the song while you read it.)

Heyy! Heyyyyeh! Heyyyyeh!
I cant explain.
But your smile is turning me insane.
If you fall I'll always catch you
even if you think that theres no more time

I know it seems
when were together it feels like an endless dream
My arguments one sided
you make my life just that more lighted
whenever your near

Youre my healer
i am a just killer
when it comes to you
you know its true
I just cannot compare to you

You can help this
all i need is practice if you can bare to try agaiiiiinnnn. Tonight

Heyy! Heyyyeh! Heyyyeh!

Just in tiiiiime
You came into my life to set me free
My heart was split is sections
but then you made the love connection
and now im fine-iiine-AYAYAyine!

I never check
But if you leave i will become a sorry wreck
I love the way you smile
Like an angel, my nirvana
and you make me freeze in tiiii-me

(I'm going to end it there)

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Your next song will be The Catalyst by Linkin Park. Your theme will be Confidence. Good luck
Debate Round No. 2
BlackVoid

Pro

Linkin Park - Catalyst

I'd label the chorus and everything but the structure of this song is kind of strange, so I wont.

I purposely made this very vague to fit in a variety of circumstances. Its basically about sticking up for yourself (confidence in a way, I suppose) and not letting others push you around.

They can not stop me now
I'm immortal, and they're never gonna find out how
Cause I'll find my own way
I'll find my own path
I'll do my own thing
I'll show them my wrath
Oh!

They can not stop me now
I'm immortal, and they're never gonna find out how
Cause I'll find my own way
I'll find my own path
I'll do my own thing
I'll show them my wrath
Oh!

And all it took was that one day
Decided I wont be your preyyyyyy

They can not stop me now
I'm immortal, and they're never gonna find out how

And next time I, go to that place
I'll show them I cant be disgraced
They'll know that I, wont be the one
Who takes their blame, and is undone

They can not stop me now
Didnt work; not quite exactly how they planned it out
It all made me strong-er
Made me a warrior
Decided that I, will
Take it no longer

They can not stop me now
Didnt work; not quite exactly how they planned it out
It all made me strong-er
Made me a warrior
Decided that I, will
Take it no longer

And next time I, go to that place
I'll show them I cant be disgraced
They'll know that I, wont be the one
Who takes the blame, and is undone

Go away
No disgrace
Go away
No disgrace
(Repeat 5x)

I'll end it here, the rest is just repeats.





Alright, your song is My Immortal by Evanescence, and your theme is sadness. Depress me. xD



4stFire

Con

4stFire forfeited this round.
Debate Round No. 3
BlackVoid

Pro

Well thats unfortunate.
4stFire

Con

I apologize for my absence. I know this is a very structured, time sensitive debate and I messed that up. I'd definitely like to try this again with my opponent perhaps some time when I'm less busy... Again, sorry.
Debate Round No. 4
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Posted by BlackVoid 6 years ago
BlackVoid
No problem. I've been there before. Things come up, we just cant help it sometimes.
Posted by BlackVoid 6 years ago
BlackVoid
Oh and about the chorus thing, I meant it as the choruses just have to repeat in the same spots as the original, not that they have to be the same words.
Posted by Dakota-Hiltzman 6 years ago
Dakota-Hiltzman
I can't say I want to do this debate, but I definitely want to follow it!
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m93samman
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