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2/12/2014 5:29:35 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
This thread is about the book that I've been writing, "Luther." I will probably make a lot of posts on this thread.
It is a Sci-Fi, set in the year 2101 AD, which is at the beginning of the 22nd century. I will cover just about everything pertaining to the book.
WARNING:
1. The book is politically incorrect in many places.
2. The values of humanity and of aliens in 2101 may contrast sharply with the values of today.

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2/12/2014 5:46:55 PM
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Story Background Part One:

As described in another forum, WWIII takes place between the Islamic "Grand Caliphate" and the UN "Allies." 1.9 Billion people are killed in the conflict.
The war results in the unification of humanity under the World Republic, formally established in 2052. Its first President, Robert Hedrick (a war hero of WWIII), takes office in January of 2053.
In 2052 a group of Christians concerned about the global government take the White House, They take the World Congress hostage, and they demand permission for Christians throughout the world to secede from the World Republic and form their own nation in what was the Southern US. Their plans fail. The incident is remembered as the "2052 Christian Insurgency Crisis."

President Hedrick's Vice-President, John A. Wickham, wins the 2056 Presidential Election and takes office as President of the World Republic in January, 2057.

In 2059 a "Folding Device" is developed and the first interstellar spacecraft developed by man, the "Mayflower," reaches the habitable planet dubbed "Plymouth," located in the Proxima Centauri Star System.
On the same year a second ship reaches the habitable planet dubbed "Sherwood," which orbits Alpha Centauri A.
This is the same year that a military outpost on the uninhabited planet of "Stradivarius" receives an alien transmission, a message which is remembered as the "Stradivarius Transmission." This message whisks humanity further into a new age...
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2/12/2014 6:14:09 PM
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Story Background Part Two:

The Stradivarius Transmission explained what was going on:
There was a war going on between four alien nations: The Ruthenholl Expansionist Regime allied with the Chibaku Empire, versus the Kingdom of Chavois allied with the Yobokoya Equalist Union.

The Ruthenholl Expansionist Regime was formerly known as the Kingdom of Ruthenholl. It and the Kingdom of Chavois consisted of the same species: the Scrao, which were a bipedal mushroom species. The Ruthenholl called the Scrao by the name of "Ponzer." The Kingdom of Chavois called the Scrao by the name of "Larotte."
The monarchy of Ruthenholl had recently been overthrown and replaced by a fascist, racist government that believed the Ponzer ethnic group (which controlled the nation of Ruthenholl) was superior to all other Scrao ethnic groups. They seeked to conquer the Kingdom of Chavois, which consisted of the only Scrao ethnic groups not under the dominion of the Ponzer.
The nation of Ruthenholl conducted massive genocide campaigns against "inferior" non-Ponzer ethnic groups. These massacres were perpetrated by war criminals such as Durich Mendenburg, a Ruthenholl general.

The Yobokoya Equalist Union had a system very similar to communism. The Yobokoya were, by the way, a lobster-like species. Their relations with the two Scrao nations was tense. However, when the Ruthenholl Expansionist Regime attacked the Yobokoya and the Larotte the two sides teamed up.

Finally, the Chibaku were a plantlike species that believed their species were superior to all other species. They worshipped their Emperor, the "Divine Dragon Emperor," as a god. In an attempt to conquer all the other species and annex their solar systems, they had sided with the Ruthenholl Expansionist Regime.

The King of Chavois had sent the message to the Stradivarius Outpost. The transmission revealed that the war had been going on since 2057 according to the human calendar, and that both sides were at a stalemate, with an estimated 1 million soldiers on both sides dying everyday. It was called the "Binary Alliance War," since there were two nations per faction.
The message asked humanity to get involved in the war, to fight on the side of Chavois and the Yobokoya Equalist Union, against Ruthenholl and the Chibaku Empire. Humanity was promised that if their side won, they'd be given many star systems and planets belonging to the Chibaku and Ruthenholl.

Humanity was reluctant to enter the war. A poll conducted by the World Republic revealed that 61% of people opposed humanity entering this war. After all, people argued, humanity had just recently emerged from its most devastating war ever.
However, in September of 2059 41 Chibaku battleships entered the Sol System and began bombarding Earth from orbit, in a week-long massacre known as the "Day of Sulfur," despite the fact that the attack lasted a week.
The attack ended when the World Republic had wiped out the last Chibaku warship in Earth's orbit using spaceborne missiles, some of them nuclear.
The attack resulted in the deaths of nearly 100 million humans, most of them in the regions that were formerly Kazakhstan, Uzbekistan, China, India, Pakistan, Afghanistan, Turkmenistan, Tajikistan, and Mongolia.
In response to the Day of Sulfur, and with almost unanimous approval from humanity, President John Abner Wickham declared war on the Chibaku Empire on October 29, 2059.

However, there was a problem. Humanity had no battleships in space. Therefore, the next several months were spent sending battleships and aircraft carriers from WWIII into space and refitting them for movement and warfare in space.
On February of 2060 the World Republic Extra-Terrestrial Navy (WRETN) embarked for Oji No Miaki, the Star System which contained Eikosami, the Chibaku homeworld and capital.
And thus, humanity was launched into its first extra-terrestrial conflict...
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2/12/2014 6:37:28 PM
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Story Background Part Three:

When the WRETN fleet entered Oji No Miaki, their strategy was to make their way to Eikosami and take out Chibaku patrols as they encountered them, jamming enemy transmissions so that Eikosami would have no way of knowing that the humans were coming.
As they encountered the Chibaku warships, which would deploy spaceplanes, the Chibaku defenders fought bravely. Many Chibaku spaceplanes crashed themselves into the human warships, demonstrations of loyalty to their emperor.

Nevertheless the human fleet made it to Eikosami on March 11, 2060, about one month after they embarked. The second they arrived there was a great battle between the "Eikosami Defense Corps" and the human fleet. The humans sent a human spaceplane onto the surface of Eikosami and it crashed itself into the Divine Dragon Emperor's palace, setting the building ablaze. The occupants of the plane, several commandos, ejected from the plane before it crashed and they stormed the burning palace, capturing the Chibaku Empire and escorting him to a second human spaceplane, which took them all back up into orbit.
In human custody, the Emperor was forced to order his armies to ceasefire. But WRTETN went either further. They ordered the Chibaku emperor to turn his forces on the Ruthenholl forces.

The war came to an end on January, 2061.

According to the terms of the peace treaty, humanity gained many star systems belonging to the Chibaku and a few belonging to Ruthenholl.
Also, the Chibaku and Ponxer war criminals either were put on trial or escaped justice.

Humanity now had 54 habitable planets within its domain. There was now the task of expelling all Chibaku and Ponzer who inhabited humanity's new territories, a task which was done over several decades.
Human settlers replaced the Chibaku and Ponzer residents of humanity's new territories. There were 54 habitable planets, or "Territories,' within humanity's domain. Therefore, on 2063 the World Republic was replaced with the United Human Territories.
President Wickham, who had won re-election in the 2060 election, remained president through the transition until his elected successor took office in January, 2065.

According to the constitution of the new government, the United Human Territories, each territory with at least 5 million human residents had a say in the Federal Government, that is, several seats in the House of Representatives and two seats in the House of Senate. Every territory had its own elected Governor and Territorial Congress. Washington D.C, which is located on Earth, is the capitol of the United Human Territories.

The 2060s passed, then the 2070s, then the 2080s, then the 2090s, and finally the year 2101 arrives. Throughout the decades the 54 territories are colonized, and there are now slightly less than 19 billion humans alive.
2101 is the date of the start of the story, and this concludes the story background. Next I'll get on with the actual story. Of course, I will simply write down a detailed synopsis of the story.
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2/12/2014 6:53:55 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
Short Notes Prior to Story:

1. Luther is named after the protagonist, Stephen Luther.

2. Since I find it difficult to stay interested in a single idea for a long period of time, I've divided my story into several "episodes," each one around 50 pages long.

3. Stephen Luther is a human, a resident of Earth, 24 years old, and born in the year 2077.
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2/12/2014 7:44:04 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
Stephen Luther:
Episode 1 "Pilot" Synopsis:
Part 1 of the Synopsis

The story begins with 24 year old Stephen Luther, a reporter working for Humanity News Channel, covering the story of the increasing populations of Romeoan Vacuum Sharks in Lake Superior.
The fish were introduced from the Human Territory of Romeo, a planet named after a Shakespearean because its moon, Juliet, orbits in extremely close proximity to Romeo and it is nearly the same size as Romeo.
After the coverage is completed, Stephen and his cameraman, Pedro Rodriguez, eat out at a Larotte restaurant and Stephen orders "Pousse det Gatins," a certain Larotte dish.
They talk for a little while and then Pedro is called back to the HNC Broadcasting Center.

Stephen is then called by his boss, who tells him to interview a WW3 veteran. However, Stephen only knows one WW3 veteran: his grandfather, Rudolph Luther.
So, Stephen flies to Germany. On the plane he strikes up a conversation with a Ponzer who is a citizen of the UHT and Professor of Human and Scrao History at the University of Oxford. This Ponzer's name is Hommel Spraulughsten.

When Stephen arrives in Germany, he visits his grandfather's apartment but the house's DC (Domestic Computer) won't let him in because Rudolph Luther is not home. The DC tells him that Rudolph Luther is at a nearby church, a fundamentalist Christian church, which is a rare sight in 2101. Most remaining churches teach that all religions are equal.
Stephen reluctantly attends the church service to find his grandfather. His grandfather is overjoyed to see him. After the service is over Stephen follows his grandfather to his apartment and inside the two of them talk. Apparently they had a disagreement a few years ago, but they make up now. In a manly way, of course.

Then, Stephen gets down to business. He asks his grandfather for an interview. So, they go to the nearby WW3 Museum, where Rudolph Luther says for the camera that he was the member of a local resistance group that fought the Islamic militant occupation of his city.
After the interview is over, Stephen feels like the whole thing was pointless. He wonders if it's all a test by his boss. He wonders if he was really supposed to find his boss an interesting story.

Frustrated, he goes back to the United States region, to his apartment in California. Sitting in his room, he hears a knock at the door.

Part two of the synopsis coming soon.
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2/12/2014 9:27:25 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
Luther:
Episode 1 "Pilot" Synopsis:
Part 2 of Synopsis

Stephen opened the door. Standing there was an Akrush.

The Akrush are an insectoid species that look like skeletons, except with much less empty space on them and more bulk. It's hard to explain.
Their species are perhaps the most gruesome and misogynist in the galaxy. Their population is sustained by rape. Females live in the wildernesses to avoid the crazy Akrush males.
They also believe in a religion known as Saduuf-Haliz, or "Creator's Path." According to this religion, there are universes inside of universes inside of universes and inside of the highest reality is God, or "Asria," as they call their god. They believe that in each universe there is a singe chosen species that Asria has given eternal souls to, and that every other form of life, though they may be sentient, do not have souls. The Akrush believe themselves to be this superior race of our universe.
The Akrush are space-capable, having dominion over multiple star systems. However, their species are divided into five Akrush nations: Al-Shabaar, Talif, Quds, Al-Muqaba, and Wasr Dhabi.

The Akrush asked Stephen permission to hide in his house from people who were pursuing it. The Akrush sounded desperate, urgent, so Stephen agreed to let it take refuge in his house for a little while.
As soon as the Akrush hid itself behind Stephen's couch, two rough-looking guys in bomber jackets knocked on Stephen's door. When Stephen answered the door, they asked him if he had seen an Akrush around. Stephen told them that he didn't, and so they walked away, presumably to search elsewhere.
Ten seconds after Stephen closed the door again, the Akrush came out from behind the couch. Stephen demanded that it tell him what was going on. So, it pulled up its sleeves and revealed the female version of an Akrush Clan Insignia. Stephen then understood that this Akrush was a female.
She then introduced herself as Sarib Tuqq, and she said that tomorrow she needed Stephen to take her to a nearby safehouse where she would be safe. Stephen agrees to help her and she sleeps on Stephen's bed while Stephen takes the couch.

The next day, Stephen takes her to this safehouse and then drives back to his apartment. Back at home he finds a television projector (a pen-sized object that can project an image onto a flat surface). He turns it on and a message plays, a message that changes Stephen's life.

According to the message, the Akrush nation of Quds was given 3000 "artificial embryonic incubators" which would allow reproduction without any sexual activity, thus leading to a new age of gender equality in Quds.
However, according to the message, they are not being used. They're lying in storage. Meanwhile, the rapes in Quds continue. It revealed that Sarib was a human rights activist who intended on delivering this video evidence somewhere.

When the video ends, Stephen is dumbstruck by what he saw on the message. Suddenly, he sees police cars down below. Panicky, he assumes that the Federal Government is trying to destroy this evidence.
He enters a neighbor's room and jumps out the window, landing safely in a dumpster. Then he gets into his car and drives off.

To make a long story short, after a car chase and fending off a government helicopter and hitchhiking with an educated hillbilly. Stephen arrives at the HNC Broadcasting Center and he plays the footage that he's seen on live television.
Then he hitchhikes a ride back home, where the police seem to have left.

But the next day, he's lounging in his home when a SWAT Team enters and captures him. Then he encounters a man in black who he saw during yesterday's big chase. But instead of arresting Stephen, the man takes Stephen into his car to take a ride...

The synopsis of this episode will continue soon.
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2/13/2014 9:37:44 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
Luther:
Episode 1 "Pilot" Synopsis:
Part 3 of Synopsis

Stephen went with the man in black for a car ride. Involuntarily, of course. The man asked why Stephen was trying to destroy Sarib's evidence. Confused, Stephen says that he thought the government was trying to do that.
Realizing they're on the same side, the man explains that the gangsters who Stephen saw the other night were hired by the Regime of Quds, not by the Human Government.

Then, the man introduces himself as "Nomad." He then explains that he is leader of the "Committee," a top-secret branch of the CIA that employs civilians as operatives.
Impressed by all that Stephen did the other night, Nomad offers Stephen a job with the Committee. When Stephen refuses, Nomad tells him that during yesterday's car chase Stephen accidentally damaged some Federal property. Therefore he's going to jail. Unless, of course, he joins the Committee.
Stephen doesn't want to give up his job as a reporter, which he had only recently acquired. However, he knows that no matter what option he chooses he'll have to give up his reporting career. And at the same time, being an "operative" sounds pretty interesting to Stephen.
Therefore, he accepts, a decision that will change his life.

After switching from a car to a helicopter, Stephen and Nomad arrive at the Committe Headquarters: a seemingly abandoned cotton mill. Inside there are several people working.
In the Committee HQ, Stephen learns from government information that the Government of Quds demands that Sarib be returned to Quds. If she doesn't, then her sister, Maraiah Saqamwa Tuqq, dies.
Therefore, Stephen's mission is this: help break Maraiah Tuqq out of the infamous Jahaammwi Prison and help her escape to the UHT, where she'll be able to have asylum.

So, Stephen is sent to Riyadh, capital of the former nation of Saudi Arabia. On the plane trip he meets a Rxiti. The Rxiti are an avian warrior race. This Rxiti, whose name is Loatzli, tells Stephen that he's on his way to the nuclear wasteland of Mecca to die, because he failed in one of his "hunts." Realizing that this guy could help them if they got into a combat situation, Stephen offers Loatzli a chance to redeem himself by helping Stephen. So, Loatzli agrees and joins Stephen on his first mission.

In the Riyadh Airport, Stephen goes to an alien restaurant, where he meets his assigned partner: Aurora.
After a brief introduction, Stephen, Aurora, and Loatzli head down to the nearby Quds Embassy. Outside the gates they disable the cameras and cause a division, allowing them to sneak into the embassy and into the plane headed for Quds. You see, the Quds Ambassador was ordered back home because he was exposed for corruption. This is his trip home, and Stephen, Aurora, and Loatzli are sneaking on board this flight.

About two hours after the flight has begun, Loatzli snaps due to claustrophobia and exposes them. The ambassador orders that the plane take a stop in the Quds planet "Sadadhi," where Jahaammwi Prison is located.

So, Stephen, Aurora, and Loatzli end up in Jahaammwi Prison. Stephen, Aurora, and Loatzli meet up with Maraiah Tuqq and they attempt a botched escape attempt.
All four of them are taken to see the Warden.
About five minutes into the Warden's interrogation, Maraiah Tuqq notices the "Book of the Way" on the Warden's shelf. The Book of the Way is the holy book of the ancient Akrush religion called "The Way," a religion eerily similar to what humans call Christianity. And guess what: The Way is an illegal religion in all five Akrush nations, all five which adhere to Saduuf-Haliz.
Anyhow, after the Warden admits that he is indeed an adherent to The Way, Stephen realizes he has leverage against the Warden and then he tells the Warden why they're there.
The Warden, much to their surprise, tells them that he is opposed to the Quds Dictator: Hasuud Zursa. Therefore...he helps them escape, though he doesn't go with them. Before they go he gives them a note, which he tells them to give to his sister, who lives in the UHT.

Two weeks after Stephen, Aurora, Loatzli, and Maraiah Tuqq escaped to the UHT, Maraiah Tuqq is safe in the CIA's custody and Loatzli has left because there was no fighting during that first mission.
Stephen and Aurora visit the Warden's sister, who lives in Toronto, Canada. They tell her what happened to her brother. Then Aurora almost mentions that the Warden was an adherent to The Way, but Stephen stops her, because he sees the Saduuf-Haliz "Book of the First Prophet" on this Akrush's shelf.

EPISODE 1 END
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2/14/2014 3:43:38 PM
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Luther
Episode 2 "Messiah Complex" Synopsis
Part 1 of Synopsis

Stephen and Aurora land in New Marseilles, capital of the Human Territory of Elysium. Their mission: investigate the mysterious disappearances of teens from New Marseilles that has been occurring since 2094.
Posing as police officers, they enter the home of the mother of a teenage girl who disappeared recently. They ask the mother a few questions and find out that the daughter attended New Marseilles County High, the same school that all of the other abducted teens attended.

Then, the cops enter the home to arrest Stephen and Aurora. Stephen and Aurora flee, but they're tasered and stunned.
When they awake, they're in jail. Stephen demands his phone call, and he is allowed to call his boss, Nomad. About ten minutes later the jailhouse is faxed a Letter of Pardon from the POTUHT (President of the United Human Territories), a letter which pardons Stephen and Aurora of their police officer impersonation. Stephen and Aurora smugly walk out of the jailhouse.

So, Stephen and Aurora drive to the home of Susan, Stephen's sister. They ask to stay for a few days or weeks. Happy to see her little brother yet confused at what's going on, Susan agrees to let them stay for a few days. Susan lives with her husband and her two transgender kids.

From Susan's computer Aurora gives Stephen an alias: Timothy, which he is to use to infiltrate New Marseilles County High as a student. Stephen uses some face makeup to make himself appear 18 years old. Aurora, meanwhile, gets a job as a teacher at the school.
The next day he gets on the school bus and goes with all the teens to New Marseilles County High.
At the school he attends classes like the students do. Nobody suspects that he's older than 18. At the school he is flirted with by a female student named Kaylee (no relation to the character in "Firefly"). Kaylee is 16 years old. Stephen's real age is 24.
Kaylee hitting on him reminds him of something that happened to him 5 years ago:

Five years ago, 19 year old Stephen Luther was a student at Hartford Actors Academy, along with his two college buddies: Rayden and Jackie.
One night, he, Rayden, and Jackie are walking back to their dorm after having seen a play performed at the college. It was a play about Obama, "Defender of GLBT Rights." Anyway, a gay couple who also saw the play with their adopted kids are stuck on the side of the road. They're stuck in the mud. Stephen, Rayden, Jackie, the two gay dudes, and the adopted children all help get the car out of the mud. Before the family drives off Stephen sees 15 year old Helen for about 5 seconds.
A few days later, Stephen is walking past the auditorium when he hears singing going on in there. Curious, he tells Rayden and Jackie that he'll get back to them later. Then he wanders into the auditorium building.
He sees Helen singing a song to "More Than Family," a famous musical released in theaters in 2089. The movie was about a brother and sister in the Old West who "smooched," to put it mildly. This movie revives the "Fratergamy" movement, and Fratergamy is legal in several Territories now.
Helen explains that in an upcoming production of the play, she's starring as Carol, the female protagonist of the film. Carol sings a lot in the play. Stephen knew a lot about the play, mostly due to his sister Susan who would sing it a lot in Stephen's early teenage years. Therefore, he offers to help Helen learn her lines in the play.

The Episode 2 Synopsis will be continued later.
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2/17/2014 2:50:22 PM
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Luther
Episode 2 "Messiah Complex" Synopsis
Part 2 of Synopsis

Anyway, continuing Stephen's flashback, over the next month he goes beyond simply teaching Helen and he begins to become friends with her.
However, they can not become romantically involved, because she is 15 and he is 19. And in the 2070s anti-pedophile laws became even stricter under POTUHT Takahashi.
However, after lip-reading a conversation between Stephen and Rayden (she used to be deaf, but now she uses a cochlear implant to help her hear) she realizes Stephen's attraction. She confronts him and they become romantically involved, but they can never get "touchy" with their relationship or Stephen will go to jail.
However, about a month after that, after the play ends, something odd happens: Helen begins spending less time with Stephen and more time with Stephen's friend, Rayden. Stephen soon realizes that they are becoming romantically involved.
Jackie, realizing that the three-way friendship is about to fall apart, organizes a camping trip. To make a kind of long story short, Rayden and Helen get "touchy," Stephen and Rayden almost kill each other, and the friendship ends. Stephen never saw Rayden nor Helen again after that camping trip.

Back to the present, Stephen attends the classes and accesses the files on the teachers to discover Aurora's true name: Lucy Parker, daughter of former President Henry Parker. But, Stephen pretends, at least for the time being, that he still doesn't know who she is.
Stephen and Aurora realize that the disappearances are connected to a couple, Willy and Bathsheba Margarine, who lead a Christian youth group at lunch every day. The school janitor, a Fundamentalist Christian, was originally a teacher but he got fired because he attempted to kick Willy and Bathsheba off the school property. He got rehired at the school as a janitor, because he's determined to find evidence to pin on those two.

About two days after Stephen and Aurora join New Marseilles County High, they drive to Willy and Bathsheba's house. They make a phone call and realize that a man named "Melchizedek" is in charge.
However, Stephen made the phone call pretending to be Willy Margarine, claiming to have a sore throat. But then he accidentally said something that slipped that he wasn't Willy. So, a minute later a group of militants with a truck held Stephen and Aurora at gunpoint. They put Stephen and Aurora in the back of the truck, blindfolded, and they are brought to an abandoned building somewhere in New Marseilles.

Stephen and Aurora are brought to see Melchizedek, who reveals he is leader of a cult known as the "Sons of the Second Sacrifice." Its mission is to breed a perfect human being who will unconditionally die for the sins of all human beings, so that everyone will automatically be saved. To breed such a child they've been abducting teenagers and forcing them into a room naked with another naked teenager of the opposite gender. Soon enough their ape instincts would take charge and a pregnancy would be the result. The Margarines were responsible for leading New Marseilles County High students to the after school youth group, where they'd be abducted.
The SSS has bred literally hundreds of children, all of which are murdered if they sin a single time. But the SSS has no intention of giving up. Melchizedek opens a trash can where the bodies of hundreds of infant corpses are kept. Stephen gets mad and tries in vain to assault Melchizedek. Angry, Melchizedek orders that Stephen and Aurora be separated, stripped, and sent into rooms with teenagers.

Coincidentally, Stephen is put in the room with the girl Kaylee, who had been pursuing him over the past couple of days. Stephen and Kaylee cover thenselves with the blanket and sit down to talk. Stephen tells Kaylee the truth about himself, and Kaylee understands why they can't date each other.
When their talk is over, Stephen comes up with an escape plan. They manage to escape from the facility and call the police from a nearby phone booth across the street.
The cops surround the building, Kaylee is taken home, and Stephen is given clothes. However, the cops are then informed that the SSS are holding all of the captives hostage at gunpoint.
Stephen walks back into the building, with only the NMCH janitor coming with him.
Inside the building, Stephen challenges Melchizedek to a battle of faith: handling a snake and seeing who gets bit. Melchizedek accepts the challenge and an Elysium Elastic Snake is taken out of its cage. Melchizedek gets bitten and dies.
Upon seeing that their leader is dead, all of the SSS militants surrender to the cops.

So, after saying a few goodbyes, Stephen and Aurora go on their way to their next mission.

END OF EPISODE 2
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2/19/2014 3:26:32 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 2/17/2014 2:50:59 PM, bubbatheclown wrote:
If anybody's reading this, tell me what you think of Luther.

It sounds intense. You've got some really dark themes in this story, and I like the way you handle them. I've seen a lot of writers fail in this regard by being too over-the-top, but you portray the issues realistically.

I do have some questions about the Akrush though. Why haven't the females evolved adaptations to protect themselves from rape? Ducks can eject unwanted sperm, and human women rely on their male companions for protection, so what adaptations do the Akrush have? Are there major physical differences between their males and females (size, strength, etc.) that create a power imbalance? Why haven't they evened the odds using technology (like how a handgun lets a woman kill a man twice her size)? Are they a social species? Why don't they have laws against rape that they enforce with their technology? I don't mean to sh*t all over your story, because it sounds like you're writing good stuff, but I think you should address those questions somewhere.
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2/19/2014 3:47:39 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 2/19/2014 3:26:32 PM, Jack212 wrote:
At 2/17/2014 2:50:59 PM, bubbatheclown wrote:
If anybody's reading this, tell me what you think of Luther.

It sounds intense. You've got some really dark themes in this story, and I like the way you handle them. I've seen a lot of writers fail in this regard by being too over-the-top, but you portray the issues realistically.

Thank you.

I do have some questions about the Akrush though. Why haven't the females evolved adaptations to protect themselves from rape? Ducks can eject unwanted sperm, and human women rely on their male companions for protection, so what adaptations do the Akrush have? Are there major physical differences between their males and females (size, strength, etc.) that create a power imbalance? Why haven't they evened the odds using technology (like how a handgun lets a woman kill a man twice her size)? Are they a social species? Why don't they have laws against rape that they enforce with their technology? I don't mean to sh*t all over your story, because it sounds like you're writing good stuff, but I think you should address those questions somewhere.

Believe me, by this point I'd be happy to even have somebody insult my story.
The truth is, the Akrush species don't have to rape each other. Consensual sexual activity would definitely be a better alternative for their species. However, their cultures are misogynist and barbaric. Even the largest Akrush religion, Creator's Path, advocates such rape. The First Prophet even demands it. The Five Akrush governments pretty much only make reforms because they're pressured to do so by the civilized nations (UHT, Kingdom of Chavois, Kingdom of Ruthenholl, etc).
To answer your question to why the women don't just fight back, the males have the societal, economic, and technology advantage. The women pretty much make themselves live like homeless people in order to escape their society. If they get their hands on a gun, they're still not as aggressive as Akrush males are.
However, something that I probably have not mentioned even in my real story is that there are networks of cooperating Akrush females with the mutual goal of surviving and resisting rapists. Sometimes these networks can be quite large, organized, and technologically advanced. There are a few camp cities set up by Akrush females in the wilderness.
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2/19/2014 4:44:17 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 2/19/2014 3:47:39 PM, bubbatheclown wrote:

Believe me, by this point I'd be happy to even have somebody insult my story.

It sucks when you've put effort into a meaningful thread, and nobody responds to it because they're too busy arguing with idiots on other topics. To be fair, this is a debating site, and meaningful threads are not the reason people join.

The truth is, the Akrush species don't have to rape each other. Consensual sexual activity would definitely be a better alternative for their species. However, their cultures are misogynist and barbaric. Even the largest Akrush religion, Creator's Path, advocates such rape. The First Prophet even demands it. The Five Akrush governments pretty much only make reforms because they're pressured to do so by the civilized nations (UHT, Kingdom of Chavois, Kingdom of Ruthenholl, etc).

The problem with this system is that Natural Selection would oppose it. Social behaviours evolve because they benefit the group. Behaviours that reduce the group's fitness are selected against. Rape harms 50% of the population, so social species quickly evolve rules against it.

To answer your question to why the women don't just fight back, the males have the societal, economic, and technology advantage. The women pretty much make themselves live like homeless people in order to escape their society. If they get their hands on a gun, they're still not as aggressive as Akrush males are.

Again, this is not favourable. Aggressiveness would be selected for amongst females, as it allows them to fight back. Fighting back lets females choose which males they mate with, which allows them to select the best genes for their offspring. The aggressive females will choose "strong" males with the best genes, while rejecting "weak" males. "Weak" males will have no choice but to resort to rape, and will target the passive females because they offer the least resistance. As the passive females will have a larger number of unfit offspring, they will be at a severe disadvantage and will quickly become a minority.

However, something that I probably have not mentioned even in my real story is that there are networks of cooperating Akrush females with the mutual goal of surviving and resisting rapists. Sometimes these networks can be quite large, organized, and technologically advanced. There are a few camp cities set up by Akrush females in the wilderness.

You obviously want to write about rape and gender equality, and I respect that. However, I think the Akrush would be more believable if it wasn't the main reason for the conflict.

Look at Darfur. Women could not leave their villages for fear of being raped by the Janjaweed militia. However, rape wasn't the reason the Janjaweed hung around. It was just a weapon they could use to inflict terror, as well as a perk of the job. The Janjaweed were employed by the Sudanese government to perform ethnic cleansing, and the source of the conflict boiled down to a few basic things:

1. Land.

2. Water.

3. Religion (though this only became significant because of existing conflict over the first two).

If I could make a suggestion, why not use genocide as the driving conflict? You've got a huge religion that wants to maintain power and wealth, and obviously has no problem with raping people, so what if they perform ethnic cleansing on non-believers and use rape as a tool? (Rape is a highly effective tool in genocide, as it means all children born will be of your ethnic group instead of the other guy's). You'd have the same driving conflict, it would just be slightly more plausible motive.
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2/19/2014 8:40:56 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 2/19/2014 4:44:17 PM, Jack212 wrote:
At 2/19/2014 3:47:39 PM, bubbatheclown wrote:

Believe me, by this point I'd be happy to even have somebody insult my story.

It sucks when you've put effort into a meaningful thread, and nobody responds to it because they're too busy arguing with idiots on other topics. To be fair, this is a debating site, and meaningful threads are not the reason people join.

The truth is, the Akrush species don't have to rape each other. Consensual sexual activity would definitely be a better alternative for their species. However, their cultures are misogynist and barbaric. Even the largest Akrush religion, Creator's Path, advocates such rape. The First Prophet even demands it. The Five Akrush governments pretty much only make reforms because they're pressured to do so by the civilized nations (UHT, Kingdom of Chavois, Kingdom of Ruthenholl, etc).

The problem with this system is that Natural Selection would oppose it. Social behaviours evolve because they benefit the group. Behaviours that reduce the group's fitness are selected against. Rape harms 50% of the population, so social species quickly evolve rules against it.

To answer your question to why the women don't just fight back, the males have the societal, economic, and technology advantage. The women pretty much make themselves live like homeless people in order to escape their society. If they get their hands on a gun, they're still not as aggressive as Akrush males are.

Again, this is not favourable. Aggressiveness would be selected for amongst females, as it allows them to fight back. Fighting back lets females choose which males they mate with, which allows them to select the best genes for their offspring. The aggressive females will choose "strong" males with the best genes, while rejecting "weak" males. "Weak" males will have no choice but to resort to rape, and will target the passive females because they offer the least resistance. As the passive females will have a larger number of unfit offspring, they will be at a severe disadvantage and will quickly become a minority.

However, something that I probably have not mentioned even in my real story is that there are networks of cooperating Akrush females with the mutual goal of surviving and resisting rapists. Sometimes these networks can be quite large, organized, and technologically advanced. There are a few camp cities set up by Akrush females in the wilderness.

You obviously want to write about rape and gender equality, and I respect that. However, I think the Akrush would be more believable if it wasn't the main reason for the conflict.

Look at Darfur. Women could not leave their villages for fear of being raped by the Janjaweed militia. However, rape wasn't the reason the Janjaweed hung around. It was just a weapon they could use to inflict terror, as well as a perk of the job. The Janjaweed were employed by the Sudanese government to perform ethnic cleansing, and the source of the conflict boiled down to a few basic things:

1. Land.

2. Water.

3. Religion (though this only became significant because of existing conflict over the first two).

If I could make a suggestion, why not use genocide as the driving conflict? You've got a huge religion that wants to maintain power and wealth, and obviously has no problem with raping people, so what if they perform ethnic cleansing on non-believers and use rape as a tool? (Rape is a highly effective tool in genocide, as it means all children born will be of your ethnic group instead of the other guy's). You'd have the same driving conflict, it would just be slightly more plausible motive.

That would be rather difficult to do, considering that most of the Akrush have pretty much been unified under one culture. There are five different Akrush nations, but their cultural differences are relatively small. At best they speak different dialects of the same language.
The reason the Akrush males do what they do is because:
A. It's a game, a hunt, and a symbol of virility.
B. They clearly enjoy what they get to do upon capturing their "prey."

And they don't feel too guilty about it because:
A. The First Prophet of Saduuf-Haliz told them it was okay to do this.
B. It populates their species.
C. They consider women to be below men, in between beast and man. They consider such rape to be about as immoral as beheading, cooking, and eating a chicken.
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2/19/2014 10:04:26 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
Wish i had the time to read all this but it seems really interesting and props for being so devoted to have such a back story and plot
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2/20/2014 6:23:15 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 2/19/2014 8:40:56 PM, bubbatheclown wrote:
At 2/19/2014 4:44:17 PM, Jack212 wrote:
At 2/19/2014 3:47:39 PM, bubbatheclown wrote:

Believe me, by this point I'd be happy to even have somebody insult my story.

It sucks when you've put effort into a meaningful thread, and nobody responds to it because they're too busy arguing with idiots on other topics. To be fair, this is a debating site, and meaningful threads are not the reason people join.

The truth is, the Akrush species don't have to rape each other. Consensual sexual activity would definitely be a better alternative for their species. However, their cultures are misogynist and barbaric. Even the largest Akrush religion, Creator's Path, advocates such rape. The First Prophet even demands it. The Five Akrush governments pretty much only make reforms because they're pressured to do so by the civilized nations (UHT, Kingdom of Chavois, Kingdom of Ruthenholl, etc).

The problem with this system is that Natural Selection would oppose it. Social behaviours evolve because they benefit the group. Behaviours that reduce the group's fitness are selected against. Rape harms 50% of the population, so social species quickly evolve rules against it.

To answer your question to why the women don't just fight back, the males have the societal, economic, and technology advantage. The women pretty much make themselves live like homeless people in order to escape their society. If they get their hands on a gun, they're still not as aggressive as Akrush males are.

Again, this is not favourable. Aggressiveness would be selected for amongst females, as it allows them to fight back. Fighting back lets females choose which males they mate with, which allows them to select the best genes for their offspring. The aggressive females will choose "strong" males with the best genes, while rejecting "weak" males. "Weak" males will have no choice but to resort to rape, and will target the passive females because they offer the least resistance. As the passive females will have a larger number of unfit offspring, they will be at a severe disadvantage and will quickly become a minority.

However, something that I probably have not mentioned even in my real story is that there are networks of cooperating Akrush females with the mutual goal of surviving and resisting rapists. Sometimes these networks can be quite large, organized, and technologically advanced. There are a few camp cities set up by Akrush females in the wilderness.

You obviously want to write about rape and gender equality, and I respect that. However, I think the Akrush would be more believable if it wasn't the main reason for the conflict.

Look at Darfur. Women could not leave their villages for fear of being raped by the Janjaweed militia. However, rape wasn't the reason the Janjaweed hung around. It was just a weapon they could use to inflict terror, as well as a perk of the job. The Janjaweed were employed by the Sudanese government to perform ethnic cleansing, and the source of the conflict boiled down to a few basic things:

1. Land.

2. Water.

3. Religion (though this only became significant because of existing conflict over the first two).

If I could make a suggestion, why not use genocide as the driving conflict? You've got a huge religion that wants to maintain power and wealth, and obviously has no problem with raping people, so what if they perform ethnic cleansing on non-believers and use rape as a tool? (Rape is a highly effective tool in genocide, as it means all children born will be of your ethnic group instead of the other guy's). You'd have the same driving conflict, it would just be slightly more plausible motive.

That would be rather difficult to do, considering that most of the Akrush have pretty much been unified under one culture. There are five different Akrush nations, but their cultural differences are relatively small. At best they speak different dialects of the same language.
The reason the Akrush males do what they do is because:
A. It's a game, a hunt, and a symbol of virility.
B. They clearly enjoy what they get to do upon capturing their "prey."

And they don't feel too guilty about it because:
A. The First Prophet of Saduuf-Haliz told them it was okay to do this.
B. It populates their species.
C. They consider women to be below men, in between beast and man. They consider such rape to be about as immoral as beheading, cooking, and eating a chicken.

All of which raises the question of why the women don't kill their male babies to prevent them from becoming rapists.

The fact is that there is no such thing as a "rape culture", just as there is no such thing as a "stealing culture", a "murder culture" or a "perjury culture". All of these behaviours are detrimental to group harmony, which limits the fitness of a social species (and from your description, the Akrush are a social species).

I think the Akrush need some minor tweaking, that's all.
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2/20/2014 5:39:38 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
I will now talk about a certain current event in the year 2101: memory trafficking.

You see, a few decades before the start of Luther, the UHT made a technological exchange with the Kingdom of Chavois. The humans gave the Larotte some medical technology that they found useful, and the humans received MIS Technology.
MIS stands for Mental Imaging Scanner. Simply put, it's a mind-reading device. A few years after the UHT received the technology, the Supreme Court of the United Human Territories ruled that any human business or government entity requiring workers to submit to a Mental Imaging Scan is unconstitutional, a ruling that still stands as of 2101. Despite this ruling, several government black operations employ Mental Imaging Scanners.
However, it's good for more than just reading minds. It can also copy memories and transfer them to someone else's brain. This market for memories was made illegal in the UHT in 2085. That's why it's a black market, a lucrative market.

You see, many people with low self-esteem want to find an escape from their own miserable existences by purchasing memories, usually about two or five minutes worth of memories per purchase. These memories are extracted illegally from various people without their consent. Anyhow, these downloaded memories usually concern a memorable occasion, the highlights of a person's life. However, these added memories from other people cause the recipients to grow dissatisfied with their own lives. Furthermore, some people just cannot handle it and they begin to think that they're the person who they received memories from, or they may think that certain added memories are real. This is known as Memory Disorientation, or Mem-Diso. Millions of people are admitted to human rehabilitation facilities every year for Mem-Diso treatment.

This is a societal issue that is quite controversial in 2101. Libertarians believe that memory trafficking should be made legal, yet regulated by the Federal Government. Conservatives and Liberals generally agree that memory trafficking should stay illegal, one of the few things that they agree on.
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2/21/2014 5:17:17 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
Yeah, here's something else about 2101: the Democratic, Republican, and Libertarian parties are the three most influential political parties in the UHT. The Libertarian Party is almost as powerful as the Democratic and Republican Parties, and at times they've taken control of a House. There's been two Libertarian Presidents since the establishment of the World Republic in 2052.
The platform of the Democratic Party is liberal, the platform of the Libertarian Party is Central, and the platform of the Republican Party is conservative. However, conservatism has, for the most part, lost its religious aspects. The difference between conservatism and liberalism in 2101 mostly has to do with foreign policy, economic policy, the legalization of Fratergamy and human-animal relationships, and Territory rights versus the authority of the Federal Government.
Earth is generally more Democratic and therefore Liberal, while many of the Territories are Republican. The most Republican (and therefore conservative) planet by far is Demeter, the agricultural breadbasket of the UHT. Demeter is the only Territory where gay marriage is still illegal, as is Fratergamy, but most Territories are yet to legalize fratergamy as of 2101. Demeter actually had two rebellions against the UHT, because the Demeter denizens wanted secession from the Union. The first rebellion was in either the late 2070s or the early 2080s (I don't remember) and the second rebellion was in 2096.
Demeter has the most Fundamentalist Christians of any Territory, including Earth. Most of these remaining Fundamentalist Christians are Conservative, as in early 21st century America conservative.

Now that I've said a bit about politics in 2101, the telling of Episode 3 is coming soon.
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2/22/2014 8:24:10 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 2/13/2014 9:38:20 AM, bubbatheclown wrote:
So, what did you think of the Pilot? Soon I'll tell Episode 2.

Very, very creative imagination, bubba. I'm trying to take in all of the details. It's a rich story.
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2/22/2014 8:45:10 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 2/22/2014 8:24:10 PM, Juan_Pablo wrote:
At 2/13/2014 9:38:20 AM, bubbatheclown wrote:
So, what did you think of the Pilot? Soon I'll tell Episode 2.

Very, very creative imagination, bubba. I'm trying to take in all of the details. It's a rich story.

Thank you, Juan Pablo. No matter what a person says about it at this point, I'm happy as long as they're saying something about it.
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2/23/2014 7:33:12 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
I had started writing this synopsis before, but I accidentally exited it before I was done, and I have to do it again, so that bummed me out. Anyhow, I will continue with the story of Stephen Luther.

Luther:
Episode 3 "In His Shoes" Synopsis
Part 1 of Synopsis

After the Binary Alliance War ended, the Ponzer planet "Gretschung" was divided among the Ponzer and the Yobokoya, as part of the terms of the peace treaty. A huge wall, the Gretschung Wall, divides the two halves of the planet, preventing Yobokoya defectors from escaping to the free Ponzer half.

There is a Yobokoya government worker, Mekler Kremlov, who works in the Yobokoya intelligence organization, GSP. He seeks to defect to Ruthenholl, and thus he managed to smuggle a letter to the free world, telling the CIA that he'd give them the identities of Yobokoya double agents working within the CIA if the CIA helped him escape from the Yobokoya Equalist Union.
This is Stephen and Aurora's new mission: sneak into the Yobokoya half of Gretschung, find Kremlov, and then the three of them are to sneak back into the Ponzer half of Gretschung.

After some shading dealings with a Ponzer named "Schwotter" who makes a living finding "cracks" in the wall which people can slip through, they get a plane (through the unlimited monetary resources of the Committee) and fly to a part of the wall where there is no security. The plane breaks down, so they have to climb the wall manually, using Iron Spikes.
They climb the wall, and upon the top of the wall they take a break and have a talk.

Aurora confirms that her real name is Lucy Parker, daughter of the Conservative President Henry Parker, the last Fundamentalist Christian President in UHT history. She is embarrassed of her dad's fundamentalist Christian and conservative views, so she kept her identity a secret from Stephen until now.
She also reveals that before she got paired up with Stephen, she partook in one mission with her first partner: Druid. Druid was her brother, whose real name was Jack Parker. The mission was to smuggle Nevolai Kosoff, leader of the Yobokoya solidarity group "Braika" (Yobokoyak for "freedom) out of the YEU. Aurora succeeded in her mission, but Druid/Jack was captured by the Yobokoya. She never saw him again.

After their rest/talk is over, they climb back down the wall and walk for about twenty minutes in the desert until they reach a small Yobokoya village: Ukayisk.
They have to keep themselves hidden, because there are no humans inside the YEU. After a brief encounter with an illegal Yobokoya religion (all religions are illegal inside the YEU), they managed to secure themselves another aircraft and, flying low enough to avoid detection by the Gretschung Laser Defense System, they fly to Stalfyisk, capital of the Yobokoya half of Gretschung. Stalfyisk is the city where Mekler Kremlov and his family live.

They land in the outskirts of Stalfyisk and decide to wait until nightfall before venturing out into the city. However, they are then ambushed by YEU soldiers. Stephen stays behind and allows himself to get captured so that Aurora is able to get away.

Aurora reaches Mekler Kremlov's house, clueless about the fate that bewaits Stephen...

Next part of synopsis coming soon
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2/26/2014 3:57:14 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
Something else about memory trafficking:
Sometimes criminals implant memories of crimes into random people so that they'll think they did it and confess to the criminal's crime.
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3/5/2014 9:01:56 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
Since there are WAY too many Luther stories that I've made, I've decided just to stop trying to write the synopsis for all of them. This thread is closed.