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Wanta try haiku?

Gentorev
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12/9/2014 3:38:42 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
A Haiku is a Japanese lyric poem, also called, "Hokku." It is a three line verse, with 5 syllables on the first line, 7 syllables on the second and 5 on the last line

A haiku doesn't have to rhyme, but I do.

(Spring)
The wind through the trees -------5 syllables
Carries pollen on the breeze-------7
And this makes me sneeze---------5

(Summer)
The sun up on high
Blazing through the cloudless skies
Nearly burns my eyes

(Autumn)
And now summers gone
Winter soon will roll along
Leaves cover the ground

(Winter)
Brrr, its flamin cold
I think its because Im old
Need hot girls to hold.
Gentorev
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12/9/2014 3:40:36 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
Brilliant stars above
Gentle breezes o'er the dunes
Singing songs of love

Love that burns more bright
Than the sun who rules the day
Or the stars of night

But now hear the cries
Of love within the darkness
Weeping as she dies.
Beginner
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12/9/2014 3:16:50 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
Bright colors make light
Warm feels make everything right
This place is so nice

Fading.. it's dulling.
Don't take this feeling from me
I fall on my knees.

Lay down: it's crowded
No one cares, not even me
No feeling, nothing.

Hey look it's a tree
What tree? Never saw a tree.
I can't see at all.
Senpai has noticed you.
Gentorev
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12/9/2014 6:35:34 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
Good one beginner. here's another from your brother.

When I hold my pen
Something always moves my hand
Then words flow agen

Wise words from on high
Sometime words of shear despair
Words that make me cry

Tear drops wet the page
Are they mine or do they come
From some dreaming sage

The scent of a rose
Drifts upon the morning breeze
It comes then it goes

As I sit alone
Dark shadows assaults my mind
while lost spirits moan
Beginner
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12/9/2014 8:34:59 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
Hello, please. Good bye.
What are you trying to say?
Kindly go away.

Hello.. again. Hi.
Let me get this thing for you.
Oh how kind. Thank you.

Hi. Hey. How are you?
Alright. Good. Not bad. Had fun.
Have a nice day. Bye.

Hey, what's going on?
Haven't seen you in a while
Me too. Bye! ... moron.
Senpai has noticed you.
Gentorev
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12/10/2014 12:14:26 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
Would that I could be
The blue waters of the sea
How glad I would be

Women would be free
Naked to frolic in me
Oh friend can you see

Girls laughing with glee
Live waters between their knees
How glad I would be
Gentorev
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12/11/2014 1:23:53 AM
Posted: 1 year ago
At 12/10/2014 1:38:06 PM, Beginner wrote:
Strings of words are strung
Same words, nicely sung
The S word; the Tongue.

One and the same bloke
Are the two of who you spoke
And they both are me.
Gentorev
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12/11/2014 1:30:31 AM
Posted: 1 year ago
At 12/11/2014 1:23:53 AM, Gentorev wrote:
At 12/10/2014 1:38:06 PM, Beginner wrote:
Strings of words are strung
Same words, nicely sung
The S word; the Tongue.

One and the same bloke
Are the two of who you spoke
And they both are me.

The hot barren earth
Drinks of the falling dew drops
Which are of no worth

With the rising sun
The dew drops steam and sizzle
And then they are gone

The man prays for rain
His dehydrated body
Praying, waits in vain

The dried bones--bleached white
Strewed round the dry water hole
Glow in the moonlight

They rattle and walk
To the man whose swollen tongue
Cannot scream or talk

They sing songs of death
Soothing the soul of he who
Longs for his last breath

The hot sun awakes
The crows from the branch above
Feed by a dry lake..
Mhykiel
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1/26/2015 7:11:23 PM
Posted: 1 year ago
At 12/9/2014 3:38:42 AM, Gentorev wrote:
A Haiku is a Japanese lyric poem, also called, "Hokku." It is a three line verse, with 5 syllables on the first line, 7 syllables on the second and 5 on the last line

A haiku doesn't have to rhyme, but I do.

(Spring)
The wind through the trees -------5 syllables
Carries pollen on the breeze-------7
And this makes me sneeze---------5

(Summer)
The sun up on high
Blazing through the cloudless skies
Nearly burns my eyes

(Autumn)
And now summers gone
Winter soon will roll along
Leaves cover the ground

(Winter)
Brrr, its flamin cold
I think its because Im old
Need hot girls to hold.

the syllable count is not always followed in modern haiku. In both modern and traditional haiku there are two images, the first line and last line, then the middle is the juxtaposition.
Gentorev
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2/2/2015 3:42:44 AM
Posted: 1 year ago
Do not ask me, friend
To judge the things that you do
To yourself be true

I will not follow
So walk not in front of me
Nor walk behind me

For I will not lead
But should you walk beside me
My friend will you be.
Gentorev
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2/2/2015 6:27:58 AM
Posted: 1 year ago
Pain and passion scream
Through mists of the evening
In the dreamers dream

His soul is churning
His wild eyes rolling in fear
His spirit burning

In the fires of hell
His silent voice is screaming
Words I know so well

Forgive me my Lord
For those I have killed today
With Gun and with sword

They blessed me today
Then they send me out to kill
O, Lord how I pray

One day wars will cease
One day we will all know love
In a world at peace..
Fido
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2/3/2015 3:49:36 PM
Posted: 1 year ago
More formality for the formally minded. There may be a rule I haven't broken yet, like writing from the grave or getting caught in the mirror; and yet I feel that is what life and art is about. Forward progress demands freedom of thought. Freedom of thought results in changed action, and action, doing, is art. Break the icons of the old. Live free and experience free will.
Gentorev
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2/3/2015 11:47:56 PM
Posted: 1 year ago
At 2/3/2015 3:49:36 PM, Fido wrote:
More formality for the formally minded. There may be a rule I haven't broken yet, like writing from the grave or getting caught in the mirror; and yet I feel that is what life and art is about. Forward progress demands freedom of thought. Freedom of thought results in changed action, and action, doing, is art. Break the icons of the old. Live free and experience free will.

Anyone can write 5
But that doesn't mean it's art 7
Some should remain quite 5

There are certain rules 5
That when broken by people 7
Show them to be fools 5

Talent can't be bought 5
And Forward progress demands 7
The freedom of thought 5

But when thoughts are few 5
And speak only of lost love 7
And naught that is new 5

It is so boring 5
That readers tend to nod off 7
And end up snoring. 5
Fido
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2/4/2015 12:18:44 AM
Posted: 1 year ago
You might have to spare me, old timer. There is a reason Field Marshall Slims and General Macarthur were able to beat up on the Japanese so profoundly. To figure out their form was to understand the man, and to understand the man made possible his defeat. Never give yourself away. Your formality reveals you, and says more about you than your words say about anything. Did you tell me you read Service, or did I know? I have not read them all, and there were many I liked for the same reason you do, no doubt. The difference between you and I is not that of civilized and savage. It is the difference between Byzantine and Renaissance in visual art. I am not arguing with you. I don't expect to change your mind. What ever works for you is fine, and what ever works for the next guy or gal is fine to. It is about self expression, and not molding your self to a form. Some people like the form. I will never let the form stop me for expressing my feelings and in fact, even to say poetry is a limitation. I consider it as fiction, and I may write a short story from time to time; but I can't bring myself to waste time on larger works since to say with non fiction is easy and fast.
Gentorev
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2/4/2015 2:30:09 AM
Posted: 1 year ago
At 2/4/2015 12:18:44 AM, Fido wrote:
You might have to spare me, old timer. There is a reason Field Marshall Slims and General Macarthur were able to beat up on the Japanese so profoundly. To figure out their form was to understand the man, and to understand the man made possible his defeat. Never give yourself away. Your formality reveals you, and says more about you than your words say about anything. Did you tell me you read Service, or did I know? I have not read them all, and there were many I liked for the same reason you do, no doubt. The difference between you and I is not that of civilized and savage. It is the difference between Byzantine and Renaissance in visual art. I am not arguing with you. I don't expect to change your mind. What ever works for you is fine, and what ever works for the next guy or gal is fine to. It is about self expression, and not molding your self to a form. Some people like the form. I will never let the form stop me for expressing my feelings and in fact, even to say poetry is a limitation. I consider it as fiction, and I may write a short story from time to time; but I can't bring myself to waste time on larger works since to say with non fiction is easy and fast.

I make a living
From the po-et-ry I write
So I'm forgiving

I'll not change, no time
Free verse is not the seller
As is words that rhym

Get out of my face
I don't care what you may do
For I rest my case.
Gentorev
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2/5/2015 3:09:51 AM
Posted: 1 year ago
At 2/4/2015 7:36:07 AM, Fido wrote:
People have too many dollars and not enough sense.

The dollars and cents
That I have banked, were all once
Pounds, shillings, and pence

And fido the dog
Keeps following me around
He thinks I'm his God.
Gentorev
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2/11/2015 7:20:42 PM
Posted: 1 year ago
I'm a chef by trade
Good food slopped onto a plate
Will be rejected

While slop on a plate
Which is pleasing to the eye
Will be accepted

But slop is still slop
And the taste cannot be changed
By presentation

All the connoisseurs
Will know what's slop and what's good
They cannot be fooled
SolonKR
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2/11/2015 8:29:03 PM
Posted: 1 year ago
It's not my own, but my favorite by far is

Help me, I am trapped
in a haiku factory.
Please send help before
SO to Bailey, the love of my life <3
Gentorev
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2/11/2015 10:25:22 PM
Posted: 1 year ago
At 2/11/2015 8:29:03 PM, SolonKR wrote:
It's not my own, but my favorite by far is

Help me, I am trapped
in a haiku factory.
Please send help before

Before eight AM
Or do you mean eight PM
Please make up your mind.
Gentorev
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2/11/2015 10:26:59 PM
Posted: 1 year ago
In the swirling mist
I see the cold queen I kissed
Lips of frozen ice

In her loving arms
I lay frozen in sweet calm
Caught as in a vice

Sleep is all I seek
Sleep lover I hear her speak
My love will suffice
YoshiBoy13
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3/1/2015 7:08:10 AM
Posted: 1 year ago
Haiku - it's so hard
to fit any meaning in
such a tiny space.
- Just because you're narrow-minded doesn't mean you're always right.
Fido
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3/7/2015 12:54:21 AM
Posted: 1 year ago
At 3/1/2015 11:50:56 AM, FREEDO wrote:
Syllables
Count them
Remember to rhyme
For God sakes don't have fun

I am so looking for a like button on this post.
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3/13/2015 2:54:47 AM
Posted: 1 year ago
Hey! I think I recall seeing your username once or twice, but I don't think I was on the old enough during the time you were there to really get to know you.

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3/15/2015 1:59:36 AM
Posted: 1 year ago
At 3/13/2015 2:54:47 AM, Winnienie wrote:
Hey! I think I recall seeing your username once or twice, but I don't think I was on the old enough during the time you were there to really get to know you.

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