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Towards Pensylvannia Avenue (A DDO Fanfic)

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5/23/2014 11:21:22 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
Chapter 1: Logistics

"It's time, thett." I said immediately as he answered the phone. "If we want to make this happen, we've got to do it now."

"Not now, YYW. America's not ready. You won't even make it out of Iowa." Thett replied. "There's just no way Bsh1 can make it to the oval office now."

"We're going to have to clear the path, I know." I was not discouraged.

"I heard you got the Airmax Family's endorsement." Thett replied.

"Although technically I'm not supposed to know about it, they've been pumping cash into one of our super PACs and they've been pulling string behind the scenes." I continued.

"I don't think we can win, but I'm with you all the way." Thett's lack of confidence was clear, and it was not without merit. "Everyone is going to think that you're behind it, that you're just pulling the strings as you always have. Your reputation is going to be the biggest thing he has to overcome."

"You're right, but we've got a plan. After all, I'm just his husband. I'll be the first gentleman, and nothing more." I said.

"When you figure out a way to get the American people to eat that sh!t, let me know." He joked.

"Let's worry about that problem when it's more pressing. Right now, we've just got to win the primaries. Can you talk to your people? It's be nice to get Bsh1 some airtime on the major networks." I had to refocus the conversation.

"Why would you think I could do that." Thett laughed again.

"Because we're friends. But the exclusive interview that we'll give to the other side and only to the other side is a strong enough incentive." I laughed. "But you know I'd never do that, because we go so far back."

"You're a real bastard, YYW. But I'll make some calls. I'll have my people follow up." Thett knew that he'd make money putting bsh1 on his networks, which is why he was fairly easy to convince -that was the carrot, but he didn't appreciate being reminded of the stick.

"I'll make it worth your while, man. I always do." I said.

"If you win, I want my people's White House Press Room credential's restored in full. I know that we were pretty harsh on the guy now when he was campaigning, but cutting us out of the loop has been bad for business." Thett's quid pro quo offer was compelling.

"It's too early to be making those kinds of promises, but you know I'd do it for you just because of our friendship." And by friendship, I meant mutually beneficial alliance against our shared political opposition as much as I meant sincere endearment. I liked him. I couldn't help it, and he'd been good to me in the past -even if he could be difficult when it came to using his media empire to my own ends. His reluctance was understandable, but frustrating.

"Just don't abuse it while you're there. The last time I put one of your people on it led to the conflict that got our credentials revoked." Thett said.

"I didn't tell your journalist to reveal information on live TV that he could have only obtained through a high level security breach." I reminded him.

"No, but he gave it to us and we didn't know what it was." Thett continued, still jovially but noticeably less so than earlier in the conversation.

"Remember that I only suggested that you have him on as a commenter. I didn't write your teleprompter scripts. I'll be happy to do so in the future if you would so desire." I volunteered, knowing that I had done just that in the past election. "But I am still truly sorry for that unfortunate development. If there was anything I could do, you know I would, but I've been out of the game for a while now."

"We both have." Thett reflected.

"Let's get together for some cigars the next time I'm in New York. It won't be long, either. I've got to meet with the Arimax's to go over some details."

"Details?" Thett chuckled. "You're skirting the edge of campaign finance law."

"Damn right I am, and even if I step over I'm not really worried. With Roberts as the Chief Justice, I'll argue that my first amendment rights give me the privilege of colluding with the PACs." I wouldn't ordinarily be that candid, but thett was a friend.

"When we meet up in New York, we'll have to be sure and raise a glass to the First Amendment; where corporations are people and money is speech." Thett's tone suggested that he was noticeably uncomfortable by the implicates of what he was saying.

"Cheers." I replied.

It wasn't that I was determined to secure my own influence in the white house, because I'd had it before. But it Bsh1 wanted to run, and I wanted to support him. America wanted him to run as well. He was one of the most popular young legislators in the country; he'd made national headlines when he came out as America's first openly gay member of the US Senate.

He was a spirited and dynamic speaker that could, through his endearing charm and disarming presence, woo even a room of the most rabid political opponents. I, on the other hand, could be unsettling to even our most loyal allies if they thought I had a reason to be displeased with them.
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5/23/2014 11:46:17 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
This was outstanding. Good work!

Probably my favorite thus far.
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5/23/2014 11:55:49 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 5/23/2014 11:54:12 PM, NiqashMotawadi3 wrote:
At 5/23/2014 11:46:17 PM, Csareo wrote:
This was outstanding. Good work!

Probably my favorite thus far.

Sutom.

Don't you have better things to do with your life?
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#UnbanTheMadman

#BetOnThett

"Don't quote me, ever." -Max

"My name is max. I'm not a big fan of slacks"- Max rapping

"Walmart should have the opportunity to bribe a politician to it's agenda" -Max

"Thett, you're really good at convincing people you're a decent person"-tulle

"You fit the character of Regina George quite nicely"- Sam

: At 11/12/2016 11:49:40 PM, Raisor wrote:
: thett was right
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5/23/2014 11:57:26 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 5/23/2014 11:55:49 PM, thett3 wrote:
At 5/23/2014 11:54:12 PM, NiqashMotawadi3 wrote:
At 5/23/2014 11:46:17 PM, Csareo wrote:
This was outstanding. Good work!

Probably my favorite thus far.

Sutom.

Don't you have better things to do with your life?

Woah. Now that's a personal insult.
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5/23/2014 11:59:34 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 5/23/2014 11:57:26 PM, NiqashMotawadi3 wrote:
At 5/23/2014 11:55:49 PM, thett3 wrote:
At 5/23/2014 11:54:12 PM, NiqashMotawadi3 wrote:
At 5/23/2014 11:46:17 PM, Csareo wrote:
This was outstanding. Good work!

Probably my favorite thus far.

Sutom.

Don't you have better things to do with your life?

Woah. Now that's a personal insult.

I'm sure your delicate sensibilities are very damaged
DDO Vice President

#StandwithBossy

#UnbanTheMadman

#BetOnThett

"Don't quote me, ever." -Max

"My name is max. I'm not a big fan of slacks"- Max rapping

"Walmart should have the opportunity to bribe a politician to it's agenda" -Max

"Thett, you're really good at convincing people you're a decent person"-tulle

"You fit the character of Regina George quite nicely"- Sam

: At 11/12/2016 11:49:40 PM, Raisor wrote:
: thett was right
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5/24/2014 12:00:36 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 5/23/2014 11:59:34 PM, thett3 wrote:
At 5/23/2014 11:57:26 PM, NiqashMotawadi3 wrote:
At 5/23/2014 11:55:49 PM, thett3 wrote:
At 5/23/2014 11:54:12 PM, NiqashMotawadi3 wrote:
At 5/23/2014 11:46:17 PM, Csareo wrote:
This was outstanding. Good work!

Probably my favorite thus far.

Sutom.

Don't you have better things to do with your life?

Woah. Now that's a personal insult.

I'm sure your delicate sensibilities are very damaged

Woah. RIght in the ribs. You surely know how to offend another man.
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5/24/2014 12:01:11 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 5/24/2014 12:00:36 AM, NiqashMotawadi3 wrote:
At 5/23/2014 11:59:34 PM, thett3 wrote:
At 5/23/2014 11:57:26 PM, NiqashMotawadi3 wrote:
At 5/23/2014 11:55:49 PM, thett3 wrote:
At 5/23/2014 11:54:12 PM, NiqashMotawadi3 wrote:
At 5/23/2014 11:46:17 PM, Csareo wrote:
This was outstanding. Good work!

Probably my favorite thus far.

Sutom.

Don't you have better things to do with your life?

Woah. Now that's a personal insult.

I'm sure your delicate sensibilities are very damaged

Woah. RIght in the ribs. You surely know how to offend another man.

Just don't insult me back, it'll destroy my fragile ego
DDO Vice President

#StandwithBossy

#UnbanTheMadman

#BetOnThett

"Don't quote me, ever." -Max

"My name is max. I'm not a big fan of slacks"- Max rapping

"Walmart should have the opportunity to bribe a politician to it's agenda" -Max

"Thett, you're really good at convincing people you're a decent person"-tulle

"You fit the character of Regina George quite nicely"- Sam

: At 11/12/2016 11:49:40 PM, Raisor wrote:
: thett was right
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5/24/2014 12:03:53 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 5/23/2014 11:46:17 PM, Csareo wrote:
This was outstanding. Good work!

Probably my favorite thus far.

Thanks, Jif.
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5/24/2014 12:04:17 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 5/24/2014 12:01:11 AM, thett3 wrote:
At 5/24/2014 12:00:36 AM, NiqashMotawadi3 wrote:
At 5/23/2014 11:59:34 PM, thett3 wrote:
At 5/23/2014 11:57:26 PM, NiqashMotawadi3 wrote:
At 5/23/2014 11:55:49 PM, thett3 wrote:
At 5/23/2014 11:54:12 PM, NiqashMotawadi3 wrote:
At 5/23/2014 11:46:17 PM, Csareo wrote:
This was outstanding. Good work!

Probably my favorite thus far.

Sutom.

Don't you have better things to do with your life?

Woah. Now that's a personal insult.

I'm sure your delicate sensibilities are very damaged

Woah. RIght in the ribs. You surely know how to offend another man.

Just don't insult me back, it'll destroy my fragile ego

Insults are for ill-mannered kiddies. I'm a well-groomed, intelligent chap.
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5/24/2014 12:05:51 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
Very well done. I may have to follow this fanfic. You'd probably improve the likelihood of that by adding a "progressivedem" character hahaha, but I won't pressure you into that.
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5/24/2014 12:07:58 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 5/24/2014 12:05:51 AM, progressivedem22 wrote:
Very well done. I may have to follow this fanfic. You'd probably improve the likelihood of that by adding a "progressivedem" character hahaha, but I won't pressure you into that.

Eventually, most of the main members are going to find their way into the plot, mostly on the campaign trail, though.
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5/24/2014 12:09:21 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 5/24/2014 12:05:51 AM, progressivedem22 wrote:
Very well done. I may have to follow this fanfic. You'd probably improve the likelihood of that by adding a "progressivedem" character hahaha, but I won't pressure you into that.

But I appreciate it. This is just a first chapter, though. As more characters get introduced, it'l become more interesting.
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5/24/2014 12:09:25 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 5/24/2014 12:07:58 AM, YYW wrote:
At 5/24/2014 12:05:51 AM, progressivedem22 wrote:
Very well done. I may have to follow this fanfic. You'd probably improve the likelihood of that by adding a "progressivedem" character hahaha, but I won't pressure you into that.

Eventually, most of the main members are going to find their way into the plot, mostly on the campaign trail, though.

Oh the possibilities. You could turn one of us into a Joe the Plumber type character at that rate.
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5/24/2014 12:10:35 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 5/24/2014 12:09:25 AM, progressivedem22 wrote:
At 5/24/2014 12:07:58 AM, YYW wrote:
At 5/24/2014 12:05:51 AM, progressivedem22 wrote:
Very well done. I may have to follow this fanfic. You'd probably improve the likelihood of that by adding a "progressivedem" character hahaha, but I won't pressure you into that.

Eventually, most of the main members are going to find their way into the plot, mostly on the campaign trail, though.

Oh the possibilities. You could turn one of us into a Joe the Plumber type character at that rate.

I've been thinking about how I might script a Town Hall in Iowa... and that might come up haha
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5/24/2014 12:13:59 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 5/24/2014 12:03:53 AM, YYW wrote:
At 5/23/2014 11:46:17 PM, Csareo wrote:
This was outstanding. Good work!

Probably my favorite thus far.

Thanks, Jif.

I like the skit and laugh thing you did also. This is an intro, so I don't think it should of started dramatic or serious. You did a good job of setting up a plot and characters. You obviously used several literary devices to your advantage.

My advice, which you probably wont need, is to make sure you know where comedy and story should be. The intro makes it seem that you will not go fully with either one
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5/24/2014 12:18:57 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 5/24/2014 12:15:31 AM, EndarkenedRationalist wrote:
A first-person perspective one too! Way to stand out.

I'll add this to the fan-fiction I'm following.

Thanks, End. I might try something clever with the perspective later on, but we'll see. I don't want to give too much away.
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5/24/2014 12:20:15 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 5/24/2014 12:19:28 AM, YYW wrote:
So, is it fair to say that everyone other than Niquash who has read it likes it? Awesome.

Eh. Niqash just criticises the people he has scrapes with. I think he did it to Zaradi too.
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5/24/2014 12:22:46 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 5/24/2014 12:20:15 AM, EndarkenedRationalist wrote:
At 5/24/2014 12:19:28 AM, YYW wrote:
So, is it fair to say that everyone other than Niquash who has read it likes it? Awesome.

Eh. Niqash just criticises the people he has scrapes with. I think he did it to Zaradi too.

It's fine. I read the first paragraph of the first story he wrote. If that's what he wants to do, it's fine... but it's just not something I'm interested in.
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5/24/2014 1:10:59 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 5/24/2014 12:20:15 AM, EndarkenedRationalist wrote:
At 5/24/2014 12:19:28 AM, YYW wrote:
So, is it fair to say that everyone other than Niquash who has read it likes it? Awesome.

Eh. Niqash just criticises the people he has scrapes with. I think he did it to Zaradi too.

I would like to see evidence that I had any "scrapes with" Zaradi or Linkish, two people I have criticized over their writing, simply because I'm not a sutom-er, and not because of anything else.
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5/24/2014 1:25:08 AM
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At 5/24/2014 1:10:59 AM, NiqashMotawadi3 wrote:
At 5/24/2014 12:20:15 AM, EndarkenedRationalist wrote:
At 5/24/2014 12:19:28 AM, YYW wrote:
So, is it fair to say that everyone other than Niquash who has read it likes it? Awesome.

Eh. Niqash just criticises the people he has scrapes with. I think he did it to Zaradi too.

I would like to see evidence that I had any "scrapes with" Zaradi or Linkish, two people I have criticized over their writing, simply because I'm not a sutom-er, and not because of anything else.

Funny since sutom doesn't seem to be an English word yet you consistently apply it.
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5/24/2014 1:29:26 AM
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At 5/24/2014 1:28:04 AM, NiqashMotawadi3 wrote:
Structure is a cage, but pearls are made in their own cages, while pebbles tumble freely around the hill.

A pearl that lingers in its cage can never display beauty to the world.
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5/24/2014 1:43:39 AM
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This is great. You write very directly, without much pointless fluff. Love it.
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