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Adam_Godzilla
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11/6/2014 7:29:09 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
A/N:
Gosh, did it take a while. Writer's block is pretty formidable. Like Rev, these are one of those ark thingies. But anyway, here's chapter 3. So please enjoy!

Previous chapters:
(1)http://www.debate.org...
(2)http://www.debate.org...
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Present day

Drip.

Drip.

Drip.

"Please"" The man croaked. Hair spangled and sweating from his half naked body, or what was left of his body. Now covered with patches of skinless meat. Flakes of skin rested near his feet that did not touch the ground. Along with a growing pool of red, dark blood, oozing and spreading.

"Again." Altar told his servant. His eyes were bloodshot and tired, lacking sleep. His white hair was trimmed neatly and evenly on the sides of his head where the rest of his hair was black. The ragged clothed servant nodded slightly, eyes glowed with excitement. He took out a sharp Roylatham dagger, fine and silver in colour. The captive looked at it in horror with his mouth gaped in a wide "no".

"I told you everything I know! S-s-stop!" He wriggled from his chains with saliva dribbling from his mouth. "P-p-please stop, I"ll do anything, anything you tell me. Name it. I can get anything done for you!" The servant crept slowly up to him. The captive wriggled like a worm, trying to escape the chains that held his hands and feet. The chains rattled but did not break.

The servant touched the captive"s neck. It made the man wriggle more. The servant slowly caressed his fingers along his skin, trying to find a perfect spot. He found the collarbone on the man"s shoulder. Carefully, as to not dig too deep, he peeled a small piece of skin the size of a finger with the knife. The man screamed, tears streaming down. He wailed like a whore, Altar thought. But Altar did not get aroused nor excited. He only narrowed his eyes, a colourless grey pupil staring at his captive. He calmly took a napkin from the table next to him and wiped his brow and his hands. It was sweltering hot in the torture chamber, and they were several floors underground. The air was stuffy, Altar wanted to get out of the stinking place.

"Don"t stop until he says something of value. I will be back." He told his twisted servant.

The servant nodded. A smile creeped on his face.

Altar left the room and the screams of the captive faded as he walked away.

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There was a meeting inside the room. Altar faced the red doors with close proximity, a hand on the golden knob. He knew he was ten minutes late. And he knew he had no choice but to face the idiots inside. He turned the knob and opened it. Murmurs and chatters from within stopped momentarily. Altar walked into the room and was met with a large ensemble of council members seated at a long rounded dark table. All of them were silent. Some rapped their knuckles while others whistled a soft tune. Light from the windows beside Altar illuminated the dancing dust.

Altar walked to his seat, eyeing each of his peers from left to right. On the far right of the blackwood table, he gazed at Baron Lannan Roylatham, studying his paperwork quietly with broad shoulders hunched. He was an ex-soldier from the troll siege back when Altar was only a small boy. Now a cripple, losing his right foot to the war. Altar was not quite sure what to make of him. It was a mix of contempt and respect. Contempt because all the man did in the council was brood and grumble.

He saw out of the corner of his eyes, Ser Anthony Endark - the Palace Knight - standing by the window, cleaning his sword with a red cloth. A suitable color, he observed. He had some respect for the Knight. Perhaps the room was not completely filled with fools after all.

He spotted Lord Linkish Endark, the royal chief of crops. The man looked tired and quiet. The chief yawned and daydreamed. A clown, Altar thought. We have a national emergency concerning all the five kingdoms in Daltonia, concerning the city, and this council member wishes to sleep? Altar averted his attention towards the rest of the members, he sat down outside the semi circle on a special desk. Some, but not all, patiently waited for their leader to speak. Altar spoke, loud enough for all to hear.

"We have a problem."

Murmurs erupted from the table, whispers and chatters. Altar tapped the table repeatedly, hushing them.

"I spoke with our captive." Altar said.

"And?" Asked Baron Lannan. Voice deep and rumbling, stirring some of the other members awake.

"He knows nothing."

Altar let the news sink in. He expected a shout or outcry. But no such thing came.

"Nothing at all?" asked Meister Denbug, the master of coin. And screwing wenches.

"Yes. Nothing. He knows nothing about the letter, who the sender was or from which land it came from."

"Then the gods may as well kill us all," mumbled the chief of crops. Linkish looked more bored than solemn. Altar was quick to reply.

"I wish they would kill you."

"Now, now"" Lannan growled. Linkish glanced at Lannan, then at Altar, and quickly looked away.

"I do not need you to keep the order here," Altar told Lannan. Their eyes staring at each other.

Baron Lannan eventually looked away, saying nothing. The room filled with silence. Jacobis Bench, the official queen"s representative spoke.

"We ought to lynch every man, woman and child in this city," he said, ruffling his golden blonde hair. "I"d do it. Eventually someone would know who wrote the letter eh?"

The council Jester had his feet over the table and a leather pouch of alcoholic mead hugged to his chest. And now we have a drunk amongst us. Altar"s impatience wore thin.

"Will you shut up for once? You"re as useless as a troll." He replied, acting authoritative from his desk.

"What was that old man? I"m being serious here. It"s the only way we"ll catch him." the jester grinned. "Might as well lynch you too." Altar"s temper broke. He stood up and pointed a finger at the young man. He shouted suddenly, the words echoed around the room.

"You imbecile! Only the gods know how you came up the ranks into this council. You"ve probably bribed every single whore and tavern wench in this room." Altar stopped himself. Realised he was making enemies all around him. He carefully sat down. A voice broke the awkwardness.

"Um." a council member raised his hand. He was newly recruited and the only one who had not spoken in the room. The member looked pale and he asked what seemed to Altar as the most idiotic question of the day

"What" What is this letter I keep hearing? Did I miss something? I was absent last meeting, and I apologize. But" What exactly are we talking about?" Altar felt his head throb. He wanted to strangle the idiot.

Another member took the courtesy to explain. Lord Winston of house Loria, the queen"s adopted brother, and scholar of astronomy. Best not known for being the Bullsh*ter. He was able to spot a lie before anyone else. It made him terribly annoying. Honesty was not any council members best suit. Winston"s dark skin matched the black robes he wore.

He spoke in a quiet voice, cool and placid.

"Three evenings ago, an unknown raven appeared by the window in Grand Meister Max's chambers. He was studying the seasons and weathers of our blessed realm, Debateros. He checked to see if it came from the Diamond Banks from Illiquiria, asking about our debt again.
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Adam_Godzilla
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11/6/2014 7:30:08 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
"My queen, in three evenings, your palace will be raided and all hell will break loose.

"In three days, you will be abducted by us. Unless you listen to us and carry out our request.

"Why are we doing this? Because your kingdom is corrupted and you are an incompetent ruler. We, the brothers, would like to request something that quite frankly, no one has ever requested before.

"It"s something that"s been attempted only once in the past 500 years when Daltonian the conqueror ruled. A proposition his own son made and a proposition that got his son lynched and burned in a stake while his father watched.

"We ask something important. A change in history. A change this wretched town deserves.

"We want democracy."

"The common people are sick of your monarchy. We are sick of the game. The game of thrones.

"The monarchy must fall. The houses must divide and be eradicated. This is my humble request. If you do not announce this to the people of Daltonia by the final day, we will have no choice but to abduct you and force the high council to reform and declare the people"s independence. If the council makes the wrong choice and foolishly appoints your child as king. Then we will kill your son before he can even touch his crown.

"Do not be mistaken, we do not want any bloodshed and we"d appreciate your cooperation. But we hope you make the right choice. You will not only do the common people a favor but become an important figure in the history books to come. It"s time for change and time to end the game.

"Yours truly, the Lord of Darkness and his brothers," he finished and took a breath.

"What do we do?" asked the master of coin. A bloody obvious question to which Altar wanted to drill a hole in his skull.

"We found the man who sent the raven." Altar replied, finding his calm.

"He"s still in the Giant"s dungeon. The only useful thing he"s told me is that he was paid by a hooded man to send the letter. He says he didn"t see the man"s face. I suspect him lying so he"s still being" questioned. But for now, we have nothing on the sender. I fear we will have to evacuate the queen off the castle and cancel tonight"s wedding." Altar said solemnly.

He rose from his seat and left the table. He needed to think of a way to explain all this to his son, Romani. And he needed to get away from the council. He trusted none of them.

It didn"t make sense for the raven to arrive specifically to Meister Max. It could have gone through the royal ravens post. And only the council members knew that Max was the queen"s one trusted informant. He wasn"t sure, but Altar didn"t rule out a mole amidst the council.

The door opened before Altar could reach it. A young squire bursted into the room.

"Trouble my lords!" He wheezed and took a breath.

"What is it boy?" Baron Lannan raised his voice. Impatient and annoyed.

"The city gates. Dead men at the gates, butchered. Limbs everywhere," through exasperated voice the squire added, "Someone"s broken through."

Altar gritted his teeth. He"ll tell his son the news later. The council members bickered amongst themselves. It disgusted Altar that no one was taking any action.

"Send for a scout team. Ser Anthony will escort you. And tell the scouts to have all the houses barred and locked," he ordered the squire, who quickly nodded. Ser Anthony Endark left his window, silent during the entire time, Altar noticed. Perhaps he was the mole. Yet, Lord Jacobis had a face on him that screamed untrustworthy. But Altar had no time for guessing. He had to tell the queen the news quickly.

Altar left the room and headed straight for the throne room.

The only person he could trust was himself. And he decided he would evacuate the Queen and her child alone and discreetly, without anyone knowing.

He hoped that he was not going to be followed.

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"So master, is this what you do every day?"

Adam snorted.

"I wish I could. But I don"t have nearly as much coin as people believe." Jibber passed the cup to Adam who drank it in gulps. He was sweating and exhausted. Adam was disgustingly wet but Jibber did not mind.

"I see."

Adam laughed again.

"Where in seven hells did you learn to fock like that? I had no idea you were so"" He paused for the word. "Exuberant."

"Before I was a squire, I was many things." Jibber said.

"Like what? Did you suck c**ks for a living?" Jibber couldn"t help but smirk.

"Something like that."

Adam bellowed in laughter again.

Once his master had settled, Jibber prepared the question in his head.

"Master, may I ask one more thing?" Jibber was getting tired of saying "master", it felt too formal for someone so close in age to himself.

"Sure Jib. Oh, and don"t call me master anymore. I know you hate saying it." Adam looked at him. "I"m a bastard Jib, I don"t deserve the special status." He looked stricken then, perhaps feeling guilt. Jibber had always been good at reading people"s emotions.

"Well, I was meaning to ask back in the woods. About Lady Elizabeth I mean."

"Oh." Adam"s face fell.

"Why do you love her?"

He thought for a moment.

"Reasons." Adam replied.

"Reasons?"

"Yes. Reasons."

"Like what?"

"... I love her because I owe a great debt to her. She"s done many things for me that I"ll never be able to repay."

"And this wedding? You want to marry her? You want her hand to belong to you rather than Lord Romani?"

"Perhaps not Jib. I mean, she's my brother's wife now. Half-brother." Adam smiled at Jibber weakly. "I"m only a bastard, Jib. A whore screwing, lazy, yet to be drunk, bastard. I belong in Rat alley where all the other unfortunate sons of lords are. I was lucky enough to be the son of a bloody important one."

Jibber said nothing. He understood the feeling of unworthiness. Jibber himself was just a squire, but with big ambitions to accomplish before he died.

"So what will you do now? The wedding is tonight." He asked his friend.

"It"s beyond me now Jib. Nothing to do but watch. Truly, I should be happy for her."

Adam clasped his hands.

"It"s decided." A wide grin spread throughout his face. Uh oh, thought Jibber.

"What"s decided?"

"We will go and get drunk of course! What else to do on such a fine night! We will drink and celebrate lady Elizabeth"s wedding quietly and discreetly!" Adam stood up and faced Jibber. He extended a hand. "A drink to the death."

Jibber sighed and smiled at his friend.

"A drink to the death it is." He grabbed his hand, and got off the bed.

"For bastards and unfortunate creatures!" cheered Adam.

"Huh, if only we had an imp with us."

"Jibber, that is horrendous! We"re not that unfortunate." They giggled and laughed to tears.

Outside the whore house, the skies grew dark and the sun had set. Rain would fall soon, and wash away the dirts of Rat Alley and clean the palace floors. What the boys did not know was the rain would bring about other things too. More terrible things.

Dark powers were coming and with them came a person.

A vicious. Heartless. Monster.

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Adam_Godzilla
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11/6/2014 7:31:59 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
A/N: I initially wanted a flashback scene for chapter 3 but it would be too early and the characters not developed enough. So I made this scene instead. I had lots of trouble thinking up the world, making sure everything was super complex. I realised this was the cause of the writer's block. When I realised that this was the problem, I let go of my expectations of the world and just told myself I seriously don't have a clue how the world will be like. I considered it to looking through a telescope and examining the world. You can focus on one thing but you can't see the rest. Once I did this, I was surprised at how much I got done in a day. Perfection is a weakness. It slows you down and drags you. By the end of the day, the only perfect thing you've done is procrastination. This is what I learned.
Ok enough babbling, I only do these Author notes cause everyone cool does it :P (like a certain someone.)

Thanks for reading chapter 3! Chapter 4 will be out either in 5 days or 6. It will feature a flashback.

Special note to Linkish. Don't worry about your character :P I have plans for him.
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11/6/2014 8:55:05 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 11/6/2014 7:31:59 AM, Adam_Godzilla wrote:
A/N: I initially wanted a flashback scene for chapter 3 but it would be too early and the characters not developed enough. So I made this scene instead. I had lots of trouble thinking up the world, making sure everything was super complex. I realised this was the cause of the writer's block. When I realised that this was the problem, I let go of my expectations of the world and just told myself I seriously don't have a clue how the world will be like. I considered it to looking through a telescope and examining the world. You can focus on one thing but you can't see the rest. Once I did this, I was surprised at how much I got done in a day. Perfection is a weakness. It slows you down and drags you. By the end of the day, the only perfect thing you've done is procrastination. This is what I learned.
Ok enough babbling, I only do these Author notes cause everyone cool does it :P (like a certain someone.)

Thanks for reading chapter 3! Chapter 4 will be out either in 5 days or 6. It will feature a flashback.

Special note to Linkish. Don't worry about your character :P I have plans for him.

This chapter is even better written than the first two in my opinion. Good work! It's very vivid and interesting. I enjoyed reading it. Thank you!
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11/6/2014 10:28:28 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 11/6/2014 7:29:09 AM, Adam_Godzilla wrote:
A/N:
Gosh, did it take a while. Writer's block is pretty formidable. Like Rev, these are one of those ark thingies. But anyway, here's chapter 3. So please enjoy!
It's called an arc. And you do know what an arc is, right? :P
Previous chapters:
(1)http://www.debate.org...
(2)http://www.debate.org...
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Present day

Drip.
Drip.
Drip.

We get it.
Drip.
STAHP
"Please"" The man croaked. Hair spangled and sweating from his half naked body, or what was left of his body. Now covered with patches of skinless meat. Flakes of skin rested near his feet that did not touch the ground. Along with a growing pool of red, dark blood, oozing and spreading.
Did he have to face Annie? :O
"Again." Altar told his servant. His eyes were bloodshot and tired, lacking sleep. His white hair was trimmed neatly and evenly on the sides of his head where the rest of his hair was black. The ragged clothed servant nodded slightly, eyes glowed with excitement. He took out a sharp Roylatham dagger, fine and silver in colour. The captive looked at it in horror with his mouth gaped in a wide "no".
The servant should be Annie...I bet she would have loved to do this...
"I told you everything I know! S-s-stop!" He wriggled from his chains with saliva dribbling from his mouth. "P-p-please stop, I"ll do anything, anything you tell me. Name it. I can get anything done for you!" The servant crept slowly up to him. The captive wriggled like a worm, trying to escape the chains that held his hands and feet. The chains rattled but did not break.
They don't want anything from you. They're just being a bunch of sadistic bastards now.
The servant touched the captive"s neck. It made the man wriggle more. The servant slowly caressed his fingers along his skin, trying to find a perfect spot. He found the collarbone on the man"s shoulder. Carefully, as to not dig too deep, he peeled a small piece of skin the size of a finger with the knife. The man screamed, tears streaming down. He wailed like a whore, Altar thought. But Altar did not get aroused nor excited. He only narrowed his eyes, a colourless grey pupil staring at his captive. He calmly took a napkin from the table next to him and wiped his brow and his hands. It was sweltering hot in the torture chamber, and they were several floors underground. The air was stuffy, Altar wanted to get out of the stinking place.
Not sure who's more f*cked up: The character or the author. :P
"Don"t stop until he says something of value. I will be back." He told his twisted servant.
What if he doesn't have anything of value? O_O
The servant nodded. A smile creeped on his face.
http://i0.kym-cdn.com...
Altar left the room and the screams of the captive faded as he walked away.
This guy...
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There was a meeting inside the room. Altar faced the red doors with close proximity, a hand on the golden knob. He knew he was ten minutes late. And he knew he had no choice but to face the idiots inside. He turned the knob and opened it. Murmurs and chatters from within stopped momentarily. Altar walked into the room and was met with a large ensemble of council members seated at a long rounded dark table. All of them were silent. Some rapped their knuckles while others whistled a soft tune. Light from the windows beside Altar illuminated the dancing dust.
Love the imagery, by the way! You've improved! :D
Altar walked to his seat, eyeing each of his peers from left to right. On the far right of the blackwood table, he gazed at Baron Lannan Roylatham, studying his paperwork quietly with broad shoulders hunched. He was an ex-soldier from the troll siege back when Altar was only a small boy. Now a cripple, losing his right foot to the war. Altar was not quite sure what to make of him. It was a mix of contempt and respect. Contempt because all the man did in the council was brood and grumble.
LOL, it's funny how you're using DDO names as the last names. XD
He saw out of the corner of his eyes, Ser Anthony Endark - the Palace Knight - standing by the window, cleaning his sword with a red cloth. A suitable color, he observed. He had some respect for the Knight. Perhaps the room was not completely filled with fools after all.
Blood = Respect
I love this guy.
He spotted Lord Linkish Endark, the royal chief of crops. The man looked tired and quiet. The chief yawned and daydreamed. A clown, Altar thought. We have a national emergency concerning all the five kingdoms in Daltonia, concerning the city, and this council member wishes to sleep? Altar averted his attention towards the rest of the members, he sat down outside the semi circle on a special desk. Some, but not all, patiently waited for their leader to speak. Altar spoke, loud enough for all to hear.
Linkish reminds me of myself in 2nd period. LOL
"We have a problem."
Don't we all.
Murmurs erupted from the table, whispers and chatters. Altar tapped the table repeatedly, hushing them.
It's not that big of a surprise...
"I spoke with our captive." Altar said.
Oh, I see, not including the details.
"And?" Asked Baron Lannan. Voice deep and rumbling, stirring some of the other members awake.
Yes...?
"He knows nothing."
*facepalm* Then why torture him...
Altar let the news sink in. He expected a shout or outcry. But no such thing came.

"Nothing at all?" asked Meister Denbug, the master of coin. And screwing wenches.
Roflmao...don't we all.
"Yes. Nothing. He knows nothing about the letter, who the sender was or from which land it came from."
Why would he know in the first place? O_O
"Then the gods may as well kill us all," mumbled the chief of crops. Linkish looked more bored than solemn. Altar was quick to reply.
LOL
"I wish they would kill you."
DAYUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUM
"Now, now"" Lannan growled. Linkish glanced at Lannan, then at Altar, and quickly looked away.
We're sorry mommy.
"I do not need you to keep the order here," Altar told Lannan. Their eyes staring at each other.
FIGHT FIGHT FIGHT FIGHT FIGHT
Baron Lannan eventually looked away, saying nothing. The room filled with silence. Jacobis Bench, the official queen"s representative spoke.
Damn. No fight.
"We ought to lynch every man, woman and child in this city," he said, ruffling his golden blonde hair. "I"d do it. Eventually someone would know who wrote the letter eh?"
That sounds like Imabench.
The council Jester had his feet over the table and a leather pouch of alcoholic mead hugged to his chest. And now we have a drunk amongst us. Altar"s impatience wore thin.
Aren't they all drunk? O_O
"Will you shut up for once? You"re as useless as a troll." He replied, acting authoritative from his desk.
He is a troll. -3-
"What was that old man? I"m being serious here. It"s the only way we"ll catch him." the jester grinned. "Might as well lynch you too." Altar"s temper broke. He stood up and pointed a finger at the young man. He shouted suddenly, the words echoed around the room.
XD
"You imbecile! Only the gods know how you came up the ranks into this council. You"ve probably bribed every single whore and tavern wench in this room." Altar stopped himself. Realised he was making enemies all around him. He carefully sat down. A voice broke the awkwardness.
But...they all bribed all the whores and the wenches in the room. :(
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11/6/2014 10:30:33 AM
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"Um." a council member raised his hand. He was newly recruited and the only one who had not spoken in the room. The member looked pale and he asked what seemed to Altar as the most idiotic question of the day
Is he me? ;D
"What" What is this letter I keep hearing? Did I miss something? I was absent last meeting, and I apologize. But" What exactly are we talking about?" Altar felt his head throb. He wanted to strangle the idiot.
It feels like me...
Another member took the courtesy to explain. Lord Winston of house Loria, the queen"s adopted brother, and scholar of astronomy. Best not known for being the Bullsh*ter. He was able to spot a lie before anyone else. It made him terribly annoying. Honesty was not any council members best suit. Winston"s dark skin matched the black robes he wore.
Is this an OC?
He spoke in a quiet voice, cool and placid.

"Three evenings ago, an unknown raven appeared by the window in Grand Meister Max's chambers. He was studying the seasons and weathers of our blessed realm, Debateros. He checked to see if it came from the Diamond Banks from Illiquiria, asking about our debt again.
If DDO was a country, we'd surpass the whole world's debt combined.
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11/6/2014 11:11:19 AM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 11/6/2014 7:31:59 AM, Adam_Godzilla wrote:
A/N: I initially wanted a flashback scene for chapter 3 but it would be too early and the characters not developed enough. So I made this scene instead. I had lots of trouble thinking up the world, making sure everything was super complex. I realised this was the cause of the writer's block. When I realised that this was the problem, I let go of my expectations of the world and just told myself I seriously don't have a clue how the world will be like. I considered it to looking through a telescope and examining the world. You can focus on one thing but you can't see the rest. Once I did this, I was surprised at how much I got done in a day. Perfection is a weakness. It slows you down and drags you. By the end of the day, the only perfect thing you've done is procrastination. This is what I learned.
Ok enough babbling, I only do these Author notes cause everyone cool does it :P (like a certain someone.)

Thanks for reading chapter 3! Chapter 4 will be out either in 5 days or 6. It will feature a flashback.

Special note to Linkish. Don't worry about your character :P I have plans for him.

I loved this chapter! The best of the best.

Plus plans for my character? Shweet! I'm excited to find out what :p
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11/6/2014 12:03:07 PM
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Another delightful episode. Pretty much my favourite of the three, so far. This is a large ensemble of characters you'll need to balance. We don't even know who some of them are yet! But I imagine we will, eventually.
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11/6/2014 12:09:34 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 11/6/2014 12:03:07 PM, EndarkenedRationalist wrote:
Another delightful episode. Pretty much my favourite of the three, so far. This is a large ensemble of characters you'll need to balance. We don't even know who some of them are yet! But I imagine we will, eventually.

You and I are related! An amazing twist!

Eu, my cat just stepped on my iPad as I wrote that. Loldjrke
"I am a mystery and to unlock the mystery at my core, one must simply embrace slendermans hug with no fear."- me

"I hearby declare myself a phantom in the darkness."-me
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11/6/2014 12:18:42 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 11/6/2014 12:09:34 PM, Linkish1O2 wrote:
At 11/6/2014 12:03:07 PM, EndarkenedRationalist wrote:
Another delightful episode. Pretty much my favourite of the three, so far. This is a large ensemble of characters you'll need to balance. We don't even know who some of them are yet! But I imagine we will, eventually.

You and I are related! An amazing twist!

Well, you belong to my house. I don't think I'm actually a character.

Eu, my cat just stepped on my iPad as I wrote that. Loldjrke

xD
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11/6/2014 12:37:47 PM
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At 11/6/2014 12:18:42 PM, EndarkenedRationalist wrote:
At 11/6/2014 12:09:34 PM, Linkish1O2 wrote:
At 11/6/2014 12:03:07 PM, EndarkenedRationalist wrote:
Another delightful episode. Pretty much my favourite of the three, so far. This is a large ensemble of characters you'll need to balance. We don't even know who some of them are yet! But I imagine we will, eventually.

You and I are related! An amazing twist!

Well, you belong to my house. I don't think I'm actually a character.

Well at least i live with you :p (yes i know what house means)

Eu, my cat just stepped on my iPad as I wrote that. Loldjrke

xD
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11/6/2014 5:01:59 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 11/6/2014 8:55:05 AM, mishapqueen wrote:
At 11/6/2014 7:31:59 AM, Adam_Godzilla wrote:
A/N: I initially wanted a flashback scene for chapter 3 but it would be too early and the characters not developed enough. So I made this scene instead. I had lots of trouble thinking up the world, making sure everything was super complex. I realised this was the cause of the writer's block. When I realised that this was the problem, I let go of my expectations of the world and just told myself I seriously don't have a clue how the world will be like. I considered it to looking through a telescope and examining the world. You can focus on one thing but you can't see the rest. Once I did this, I was surprised at how much I got done in a day. Perfection is a weakness. It slows you down and drags you. By the end of the day, the only perfect thing you've done is procrastination. This is what I learned.
Ok enough babbling, I only do these Author notes cause everyone cool does it :P (like a certain someone.)

Thanks for reading chapter 3! Chapter 4 will be out either in 5 days or 6. It will feature a flashback.

Special note to Linkish. Don't worry about your character :P I have plans for him.

This chapter is even better written than the first two in my opinion. Good work! It's very vivid and interesting. I enjoyed reading it. Thank you!

This made my day. Thank you too!
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11/6/2014 5:05:27 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 11/6/2014 5:01:59 PM, Adam_Godzilla wrote:
At 11/6/2014 8:55:05 AM, mishapqueen wrote:
At 11/6/2014 7:31:59 AM, Adam_Godzilla wrote:
A/N: I initially wanted a flashback scene for chapter 3 but it would be too early and the characters not developed enough. So I made this scene instead. I had lots of trouble thinking up the world, making sure everything was super complex. I realised this was the cause of the writer's block. When I realised that this was the problem, I let go of my expectations of the world and just told myself I seriously don't have a clue how the world will be like. I considered it to looking through a telescope and examining the world. You can focus on one thing but you can't see the rest. Once I did this, I was surprised at how much I got done in a day. Perfection is a weakness. It slows you down and drags you. By the end of the day, the only perfect thing you've done is procrastination. This is what I learned.
Ok enough babbling, I only do these Author notes cause everyone cool does it :P (like a certain someone.)

Thanks for reading chapter 3! Chapter 4 will be out either in 5 days or 6. It will feature a flashback.

Special note to Linkish. Don't worry about your character :P I have plans for him.

This chapter is even better written than the first two in my opinion. Good work! It's very vivid and interesting. I enjoyed reading it. Thank you!

This made my day. Thank you too!
Yay! I'm glad! You're welcome! :D
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11/6/2014 5:13:29 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 11/6/2014 11:11:19 AM, Linkish1O2 wrote:
At 11/6/2014 7:31:59 AM, Adam_Godzilla wrote:
A/N: I initially wanted a flashback scene for chapter 3 but it would be too early and the characters not developed enough. So I made this scene instead. I had lots of trouble thinking up the world, making sure everything was super complex. I realised this was the cause of the writer's block. When I realised that this was the problem, I let go of my expectations of the world and just told myself I seriously don't have a clue how the world will be like. I considered it to looking through a telescope and examining the world. You can focus on one thing but you can't see the rest. Once I did this, I was surprised at how much I got done in a day. Perfection is a weakness. It slows you down and drags you. By the end of the day, the only perfect thing you've done is procrastination. This is what I learned.
Ok enough babbling, I only do these Author notes cause everyone cool does it :P (like a certain someone.)

Thanks for reading chapter 3! Chapter 4 will be out either in 5 days or 6. It will feature a flashback.

Special note to Linkish. Don't worry about your character :P I have plans for him.

I loved this chapter! The best of the best.

Plus plans for my character? Shweet! I'm excited to find out what :p

Yup lots of plans ^^

Thank you for the support! Really appreciate it man.
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11/6/2014 5:15:16 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 11/6/2014 12:03:07 PM, EndarkenedRationalist wrote:
Another delightful episode. Pretty much my favourite of the three, so far. This is a large ensemble of characters you'll need to balance. We don't even know who some of them are yet! But I imagine we will, eventually.

Thank you!
I have plans for all these characters so hopefully balancing doesnt get too difficult.
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11/6/2014 5:16:36 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 11/6/2014 10:11:02 AM, RevNge wrote:

Lol your comments were awesome!
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11/6/2014 5:25:08 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 11/6/2014 5:23:01 PM, YamaVonKarma wrote:
I forgot. Am I in this one?

You appear in chapter 2 :)
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11/6/2014 5:26:54 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 11/6/2014 5:16:36 PM, Adam_Godzilla wrote:
At 11/6/2014 10:11:02 AM, RevNge wrote:

Lol your comments were awesome!

Why thank you! :3

Keep it up! I can't wait for the next chapter. :D
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11/6/2014 5:29:18 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 11/6/2014 5:26:54 PM, RevNge wrote:
At 11/6/2014 5:16:36 PM, Adam_Godzilla wrote:
At 11/6/2014 10:11:02 AM, RevNge wrote:

Lol your comments were awesome!

Why thank you! :3

Keep it up! I can't wait for the next chapter. :D

Will be up in five days. Im speeding up a little.
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11/6/2014 6:58:05 PM
Posted: 2 years ago
At 11/6/2014 5:13:29 PM, Adam_Godzilla wrote:
At 11/6/2014 11:11:19 AM, Linkish1O2 wrote:
At 11/6/2014 7:31:59 AM, Adam_Godzilla wrote:
A/N: I initially wanted a flashback scene for chapter 3 but it would be too early and the characters not developed enough. So I made this scene instead. I had lots of trouble thinking up the world, making sure everything was super complex. I realised this was the cause of the writer's block. When I realised that this was the problem, I let go of my expectations of the world and just told myself I seriously don't have a clue how the world will be like. I considered it to looking through a telescope and examining the world. You can focus on one thing but you can't see the rest. Once I did this, I was surprised at how much I got done in a day. Perfection is a weakness. It slows you down and drags you. By the end of the day, the only perfect thing you've done is procrastination. This is what I learned.
Ok enough babbling, I only do these Author notes cause everyone cool does it :P (like a certain someone.)

Thanks for reading chapter 3! Chapter 4 will be out either in 5 days or 6. It will feature a flashback.

Special note to Linkish. Don't worry about your character :P I have plans for him.

I loved this chapter! The best of the best.

Plus plans for my character? Shweet! I'm excited to find out what :p

Yup lots of plans ^^

Thank you for the support! Really appreciate it man.

Your doing an amazing job! Why wouldent I support you :p
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"I hearby declare myself a phantom in the darkness."-me