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DDO FANFIC: Survivor book 1 episode 18

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4/13/2015 9:07:16 PM
Posted: 1 year ago
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Episode 00:http://www.debate.org...
Episode 01:http://www.debate.org...
(RACE FOR SURVIVAL)
Episode 02:http://www.debate.org...
(WAR?)
Episode 03:http://www.debate.org...
(BROKEN)
Episode 04:http://www.debate.org...
(FEAR IS THE GREATEST WEAPON)
Episode 05:http://www.debate.org...
(BOND)
Episode 06:http://www.debate.org...
(TIME)
Episode 07:http://www.debate.org...
(THE SENSIBLES.)
Episode 08:http://www.debate.org...
(UNITED AS ONE.)
Episode 09: http://www.debate.org...
(A LITTLE MADNESS IN THE MIX.)
Episode 10:http://www.debate.org...
(THERE ARE ALWAYS CASUALTIES.)
Episode 11:http://www.debate.org...
(THE ALMOST PERFECT DAY.)
Episode 12: http://www.debate.org...
(STANDING TALL.)
Episode 13: http://www.debate.org...
(DYING WISH.)
Episode 14:http://www.debate.org...
(LIFE AND DEATH.)
Episode 15: http://www.debate.org...
(DIVIDE.)
Episode 16:http://www.debate.org...
(DENIAL AND ACCEPTANCE.)
Episode 17:http://www.debate.org...
(A WAY OUT.)

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Hey everyone! A new change for my fic is out! From now on, every episode comes with bonus content, provided here in the Foreword. This will usually be an image that helps with the story.

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EPISODE 18: THE OFFENSIVE APPROACH.
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"I am not religious. I am a genius. I have the Universe in my hands."
-Aerogant

"Of course a jewish baby cannibalizing a jewish mommy is fine"
-Heil being retarded

"Eradicating the baby scourge from our midsts is most certainly fun. And I am proud to be your hero. Babies tremble then they hear my name.. Airmax, the hero of baby annihilation."
-Airmax
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4/13/2015 9:14:17 PM
Posted: 1 year ago
Group 01: EndarkenedRationalist, Esocialbookworm, Malacoda, DarthKirones, PetersSmith
POV: Malacoda

The defenders are gone. Shattered, broken, smashed, destroyed, whatever word you prefer. But Malacoda prefers to use more than one word to describe the defender"s situation, and those are "Without proper unity and ideology."

He sits in his same old blue room, on his same old gray bed. But something felt new... and right. He couldn"t identify what it was, but... He felt in control, as if for the first time in his life, he made his choices. He was his leader.

I guess it is my fault that the Defenders are disbanded, so, maybe I should try to reform a new team. A better, more effective team. No more liberal nonsense. From now on, Rational Madman will have to play by our rules. We will take the offensive approach.

"Offensive... Hmm... Perhaps my team shall be the "Offenders". Yes, I like the sound of that." Malacoda chuckled.

But it can"t be just an "Offender". I should create a list of who should join.

POSSIBILITIES:

Lannan.
Darth.
9spaceking.
DDD.
Pots.
PetersSmith.
Rev.
Wylted.


The next morning....

Lannan was enjoying a meal of Betac (Essentially alien bacon) and Vorpek eggs. He was still recovering from the mental wounds caused by the alien virus of the previous week and had to take therapy sessions with Adam to boost his self confidence. He sat at the white table in the center of the kitchen.

"Hey Lannan." Malacoda approached him in the most friendly manner possible.

"Uh... Hey Mal."

"I would like to offer you something. An opportunity." Malacoda sat down beside him.

"To screw things up more? No thanks." Lannan didn"t look up. He just continued to eat.

"What are you talking about? Okay, so maybe you hurt a couple people, but that wasn't you! We all acted irrationally, while yes, those emotions were yours, they were just exaggerations of them. Please, I'm starting a new group, like the Defenders, but harsher. I"ll make sure the job gets done and stays done."

Lannan took a hard look at his food, as if he was mad at it, then he looked at Malacoda. "Alright, I'll join."

POSSIBILITIES:

Lannan.
Darth.
9spaceking.
DDD.
Pots.
PetersSmith.
Rev.
Wylted.

10 minutes later...

Darth was in his room, but he addressed it as his lab. The white desk had a box of electric tools, bottles of purple nanobots, his red iPad and various weapons, pieces of armor amongst everything. Darth sat in his black hoodie on his red bed, turning his phone on and off.

"Sorry to barge in Darth, but I have an offer." Malacoda crossed his arms as he said that.

Darth look up from his phone. "Hm?"

"I am forming a new team, kind of like the Defenders, but more direct." Malacoda proudly announced.

"Look, Mal. I"ll design tech for you guys, but I'm not a soldier, I'm a scientist. I dont think that this violence accomplishes much, and I believe in violence only when necessary, and violence isn't involved with getting home."

"But--"

"Case closed. I"m not joining."

POSSIBILITIES:

Lannan.
9spaceking.
DDD.
Pots.
PetersSmith.
Rev.
Wylted.

Another 10 minutes later...

9spaceking was beside Rev"s door with a bowl of warm water, ready to go inside Rev"s room and give the sleeping Rev quite the surprise.

"Heh. Perhaps *laugh* this will make Rev *laugh* "piss" off! HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!" 9spaceking fell into a state of utter laughter, spilling half of the water on the floor as he continued into uncontrolled hysteria. While laughing, he slipped on the water, causing him to crash through the door of Rev"s bedroom.

"Nope. Not him. And I don"t think Rev is going to want to talk to anyone after this." Malacoda had watched the entire time. He turned around and walked to find Pots, seemingly both disappointed and amused.

POSSIBILITIES:

Lannan.
DDD.
Pots.
PetersSmith.
Wylted.

Several frustrating and awful minutes later...

There was only one more person on his list, Wylted. DDD and Pots had angrily denied his offer but PetersSmith decided to join.

In the large living room area was Carriead playing chess with Adam_Godzilla, Jonbonbon reading and Endark and Esocial cuddling on a couch.

"Hey, Carrie." Malacoda called.

"Yeah?" Carriead look up, right as he was going to check-mate Adam.

"Do you know where Wylted is? I need to speak him about... Something." Malacoda questioned.

"Yeah, he"s taking a space-walk, he"ll be back in a minute." Carriead answered, knocking down Adam"s King with a knight. "Check-mate, seamonster."

"Alright, thanks. " Malacoda thanked him. The door to go out for a spacewalk was beside the living area.

Malacoda looked past the sleepy Endark, who seemed comfortable with his head on his girlfriend"s lap. Too comfortable.

This is why I will get the job done. Because I know how to and can get the job done. I am Malacoda, and I will lead the Offenders.


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"I am not religious. I am a genius. I have the Universe in my hands."
-Aerogant

"Of course a jewish baby cannibalizing a jewish mommy is fine"
-Heil being retarded

"Eradicating the baby scourge from our midsts is most certainly fun. And I am proud to be your hero. Babies tremble then they hear my name.. Airmax, the hero of baby annihilation."
-Airmax
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4/13/2015 9:17:23 PM
Posted: 1 year ago
Group 02: Lannan13, Adam_Godzilla, Potbelliedgeek, Wylted, Mishapqueen, Carriead20
POV: Wylted

"Alright, thanks Mal, I"ll be there." Wylted happily responded as Malacoda walked away from the corridor that they were in. Wylted took off the silvery suit that was required for going into space.

Ah. A team where I can be myself. My not-so-politically-correct self. Now Wylted will be the fighter, not the one that people are pretending to fight for.

"You damn dirty son of a b!tch." Pots snarled. He wore a tight yellow shirt. His eyes clearly showed signs of anger. "You joined the new group didn"t you?"

"Hello Geek. Having a nice eveni- Oh that"s right, we don"t have evenings since we are in space. I happen to miss evenings, when will you and that red haired kid get us home? Wylted questioned.

"I'm on break. We will get there soon." Pots angrily responded. He was angry, but why? Why was he mad at Wylted?

"That's another word for you don"t know when we will get home. That is something to get angry about, not me being a big boy and choosing to join a group that will actually work. So why don"t you grow a pair and begin getting us home, will you?" Wylted mocked.

"Why, you... you... you... inconsiderate--" Pots began to mumble, not being able to find a word strong enough to describe Wylted.

"What"s all this shouting about?" Mishap walked out her room, clutching her pillow in one arm while rubbing her eyes with the other. "If you"re not talking about squirrels, then I am going to hit you with my pillow." She threatened sluggishly.

"No, we"re discussing the ethics of joining an all-authoritarian super-controlling team." Pots explained.

*BAMF* Mishap hit Pots in the jaw with her pillow, and then she walked back into her room.

"See? Being a whiny little schmutz causes grumpy horomonal female teenagers to wake up and hit you will their pillow. That is the way of life, Potsicle, you'd be wise to learn it." Wylted explained.

"POTSICLE?" Pots rubbed the spot that he was hit on as if it was one of his cat's tummies.

"You heard me." Wylted smirked.

Pots face went red, but he took three deep breaths and walked away. And that is my intro piece to my next guide. I"ll call it: Wylted"s guide to intimidating peasants.

Wylted entered the kitchen and got a piece of meat from the fridge, then he marched back to his room and he jumped on the bed, chewing the meat. Then he felt the ship beginning to move again. Despite the ship being able to go faster than the speed of light, the people on the ship still experienced real time.

For the first time since I was on earth, I will be able to make a difference. I am an Offender, and I will fight.

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"I am not religious. I am a genius. I have the Universe in my hands."
-Aerogant

"Of course a jewish baby cannibalizing a jewish mommy is fine"
-Heil being retarded

"Eradicating the baby scourge from our midsts is most certainly fun. And I am proud to be your hero. Babies tremble then they hear my name.. Airmax, the hero of baby annihilation."
-Airmax
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4/13/2015 9:20:29 PM
Posted: 1 year ago
Group 03: Krieg01, DDD, 9spaceking, RevNge, ElCorazonAma, That1User, Jonbonbon
POV: That1User

That1User sat on a big red chair in the relaxation room, thinking about his birth planet, Madessia. It was a cruel place ruled by a cruel emperor but he couldn't help but miss it. His family lives -- or lived there, and he had a pet lizard. He called it Clom. Clom was a simple reptile, so happy and peaceful. His small little lizard brain prevented him from being a cold cynic like Thatitus was, no. Clom was content, and now he may be gone.

"Hey Thatitus, Jonelle. An odd thing just happened." DDD came out of the cockpit, scratching his red hair.

"Did you see another of your kind?" Jonbonbon joked.

"Haha. Leprechaun jokes, very funny." DDD frowned. "Anyways, Pots came back into the cockpit, and he was so angry for some reason, he actually kicked me out. I think it"s because Mal offered me and him a spot on a new team, kind of like the Defenders, but... different. Different in the sense that Mal and Endark are different." DDD explained, sitting down on a couch.

"Huh? What"s this a about a team?" Krieg suddenly stepped in, holding several dirty plates.

"Oh, hey Krieg. I was just telling Thatitus and Jonelle about Malacoda"s new t-"

"No, I heard all that, but specifics, like where and when they will be meeting." Krieg questioned.

"Oh! The first meeting is in an hour in the conference room. He also said there will be snacks, as if that is enough to get me to join some kind of special-ops team." DDD laughed, but Krieg was gone.

"I always found matters of morality and discussion of morality to be pointless. On Madessia we always agreed on everything. Then again, if we didn't agree, then we would get kil-"

"--KILL YOU, YOU SON OF A B!TCH!" Someone screamed. The scream was followed by laughter and a thud.

Oh Loppenforth. Spaceking got into Rev"s room again. What juvenile act has he attempted on Mr.Nge this time?

"Alright guys, let"s go and separate the two... Again... If they haven"t killed each other yet." DDD stood up grumpily.

Rev stood over 9spaceking. Rev threw three punches, but 9spaceking maneuvered his head in a way so that Rev"s fist simply crashed into the metal floor. On the fourth punch, a hand caught the fist.

It was Malacoda's hand.

"Stop. Both of you." Malacoda grabbed the two by their shirts and stood them up. "You two. You keep on fighting and and playing pranks on each other, but to what end? Now no more fighting, or else you will be the official legrests of my new team, the Offenders." Malacoda ordered.

"Um... Yes sir." 9spaceking submissively responded.

"Okay, NOW I get why you don"t want to join him." That1User said to DDD.

ONE HOUR LATER...

POV: Krieg01

The conference was a dark room, with thin white lights and a nasty air temperature. There was a big round grey table in the center of the room. On the table was a crimson bowl with little cookies that had Madessian chocolate chips. Around the table was Lannan, Wylted, PetersSmith and of course, Malacoda.

"Thank you all for coming here today. I, Malacoda feel responsible for ending the Defenders, so I have formed a new team, only this one will not stand by and defend, but will take the bull by the horns and go on the of-" Malacoda explained, only interrupted by the opening of the door. "Oh, hello Krieg. May I help you? I"m a little busy right now."

Krieg walked through the door, nervous. "I... Um, yeah. I know, but that"s why I"m here. I want to join your team."

Malacoda smiled.

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"I am not religious. I am a genius. I have the Universe in my hands."
-Aerogant

"Of course a jewish baby cannibalizing a jewish mommy is fine"
-Heil being retarded

"Eradicating the baby scourge from our midsts is most certainly fun. And I am proud to be your hero. Babies tremble then they hear my name.. Airmax, the hero of baby annihilation."
-Airmax
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4/13/2015 9:21:55 PM
Posted: 1 year ago
*BONUS*

The man in the labcoat put the USB stick inside his computer. What the stick showed, was incredible.

"Yes... YES! Now Project Tempus can begin!" He yelled happily. After thirty years of research he had what he needed to perfect --

*BEEP BEEP BEEP*

"Huh?" That was the sound of his lab"s radar. Something was approaching earth. From the scanner"s estimation, it would be at earth in hours, as the object was in the Kuiper belt.

The scanner showed that the object approaching the ship is a "Capsule" ship of Madessian design, Kind of like... Those rebels that the Emperor is hunting!

I must call him immediately!

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Thanks for reading!

DarthKirones.
"I am not religious. I am a genius. I have the Universe in my hands."
-Aerogant

"Of course a jewish baby cannibalizing a jewish mommy is fine"
-Heil being retarded

"Eradicating the baby scourge from our midsts is most certainly fun. And I am proud to be your hero. Babies tremble then they hear my name.. Airmax, the hero of baby annihilation."
-Airmax
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4/15/2015 2:17:54 AM
Posted: 1 year ago
At 4/13/2015 9:21:55 PM, DarthKirones wrote:


That was quite the interesting read. Not much happens here except recruiting but I didn't mind.

I think the main issue is the dialogue. It's hard to know who's saying what since you put the speaker name at the end of the sentence. Perhaps you could add the speaker after a couple of words, like this:

"I'm gonna kill you." Malacoda said. "....."

I was confused as to what was going on between Rev an 9spaceking.

I thought the spacewalk thing and the other scifi aspects were really cool. I also liked the descriptions that you added. They were quite vivid.

Overall, I liked this chapter and am looking forward to what happens next. Since I didn't read season 1, I'm a little confused about the rebel and emperor relationship. I also liked Mishap hitting people with her pillow. That was hilarious.
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