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PoeJoe
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12/26/2009 1:20:17 AM
Posted: 6 years ago
http://musingsofjoe.com...

I don't like self-promoting too much, and I hesitate even to post this. But lately, I feel my writing style has been changing in fundamental ways, and I don't know if it's for better or worse. I would ask family members or real life friends, but they're always too kind and dishonest in their need to "protect" my feelings. I would ask a writing forum I've been participating in for the last couple of months, but they're just a bunch of pretentious pricks, to be honest.

And thus I turn to DDO.

I am very aware that it's a lot to ask. But if you have the time (and truly I would appreciate it), please check out my story linked above, and come back here to give me your thoughts: what worked for you, what didn't, thoughts on style, thoughts on structure, thoughts on the content, thoughts on anything, really. And blunt honesty is appreciated.

Thank you.
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LeafRod
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12/26/2009 9:03:47 AM
Posted: 6 years ago
I'll give you some more detailed feedback later, but overall I liked it. There were also some nice turns of phrase (pass under the overpass.) That bit about the boy and the policeman was a bit odd, I thought, but not overly so.