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wierdman
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11/30/2011 3:06:53 PM
Posted: 5 years ago
With a bleeding heart and a broken soul.
I watch her lifeless body lay
Her eyes as blue as the sea, shall Never be seen by any again.
Her hair a beautiful shade of brown
Now lay besides her motionless body.
With tears in my eyes, I can no longer watch.
I turn around, tears dripping down my chin.
My first and only love, now lay stiff and pale.
Why?...I ask,
What could lead another being to commit such a Hannis crime?
To kill an innocent being without care.
Who killed her, i can never know, but i do know that anything can happen.
I only wish i could have spent more time with Jane.

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Indophile
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11/30/2011 3:48:28 PM
Posted: 5 years ago
At 11/30/2011 3:06:53 PM, wierdman wrote:
With a bleeding heart and a broken soul.
I watch her lifeless body lay
Her eyes as blue as the sea, shall Never be seen by any again.
Her hair a beautiful shade of brown
Now lay besides her motionless body.
With tears in my eyes, I can no longer watch.
I turn around, tears dripping down my chin.
My first and only love, now lay stiff and pale.
Why?...I ask,
What could lead another being to commit such a Hannis crime?
To kill an innocent being without care.
Who killed her, i can never know, but i do know that anything can happen.
I only wish i could have spent more time with Jane.

My newest poem... you likey?

please rate and coment@http://www.teenink.com...

http://www.teenink.com...

Is this your first attempt at poetry?
You will say that I don't really know you
And it will be true.
wierdman
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11/30/2011 5:29:53 PM
Posted: 5 years ago
At 11/30/2011 3:48:28 PM, Indophile wrote:
At 11/30/2011 3:06:53 PM, wierdman wrote:
With a bleeding heart and a broken soul.
I watch her lifeless body lay
Her eyes as blue as the sea, shall Never be seen by any again.
Her hair a beautiful shade of brown
Now lay besides her motionless body.
With tears in my eyes, I can no longer watch.
I turn around, tears dripping down my chin.
My first and only love, now lay stiff and pale.
Why?...I ask,
What could lead another being to commit such a Hannis crime?
To kill an innocent being without care.
Who killed her, i can never know, but i do know that anything can happen.
I only wish i could have spent more time with Jane.

My newest poem... you likey?

please rate and coment@http://www.teenink.com...

http://www.teenink.com...

Is this your first attempt at poetry?

No.
PARADIGM_L0ST
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11/30/2011 5:40:03 PM
Posted: 5 years ago
A little macabre, but I did get a hard-on when reading it... wait, what?
"Have you ever considered suicide? If not, please do." -- Mouthwash (to Inferno)
wierdman
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11/30/2011 5:48:17 PM
Posted: 5 years ago
At 11/30/2011 5:40:03 PM, PARADIGM_L0ST wrote:
A little macabre, but I did get a hard-on when reading it... wait, what?

I don't think you guys liked this one. Try reading A suicide story.
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