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A Poem to a Girl

ConservativePolitico
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7/7/2013 2:20:29 AM
Posted: 3 years ago
Oh Maddie, how do I get you to feel something for me? I have always felt a sort of connection to you.
Yet I am paralyzed by inaction, fear grips me.
I worry I am not good enough,
Strong enough,
Brave enough,
To venture into these waters.
I fear I no longer know how to sail.
I have beached too many ships.
Winds that once were comforting, guiding, warm,
Are now Bitter and Unfamiliar.
I gaze at the sea and wish I could once more sail
But alas, I fear to drown.
Under another moon, I once stood on this very shore and waded
No, dove
Eagerly into the currents.
But the sea spat me out time and time again.
Salty, cold and alone, this beach is no longer a place of inspiration.
It is a prison.
And again the horizon is just that, a horizon.
Something to be seen and wondered at.
A line in which the great things of our world traverse
And I am to merely watch and despair.
Yes, I fear I no longer can sail and every time I think I can
I stare at my feet
Willing them to move
And I see the splinters of ships sailed.
I see the rudder I smashed upon the rocks.
I see the blood stained sands from where I lay
Gasping
After pulling myself onto shore from the waters
Pierced by my own mast.
And then there is you
On the horizon
That horizon once more
You are dancing with the moon and the sun
As you ought to be.
I smile.
Your light is as bright as theirs
And as numerous as the stars.
You grip the horizon and wield it like a bow.
I move to the water"s edge gazing longingly,
The waves lap playfully near my toes.
I hunger again to build a ship,
To dive into these waters and again reach out to the horizon.
Maybe this time my fingers will brush it.
Perhaps, I too can traverse the breach
And enter the home of the moon and the sun.
But then my heart quivers,
Something it has never done before.
I think, maybe my fingers won"t touch it
Because the horizon is untouchable.
And there you will stay
Untouchable.
Out of reach because I no longer have what it takes
To cut through the ocean.
I sit upon the beach alone.
I"ve gathered the driftwood,
Hewn from the wreckage of my past
And I have stacked it neatly.
Largest pieces on the bottom,
Sails, ropes and splinters around the base,
Smaller pieces on top.
In my right hand I hold a torch,
The pile is built to burn,
In my left, a hammer.
I feel the grip of my right hand begin to fail
Even as my left hand twitches still.
The horizon faintly glows.
Is it a ship passing in the night?
Is it a star falling to earth?
Is it the rising sun?
Or something entirely new?
I wonder.
Oh how I wonder.
I am torn.
Do I rebuild my ship once more?
Captain the seas of uncertainty to the far horizon?
Is the glow a glow at all,
Or am I destined to wash back upon this shore?
Or do I drop the torch and live on this beach
In the warm and glow of this fire?
A fire that, while small and fleeting compared to the sun
Is tangible.
So here I sit.
My hands tremble yet I do not know what to do.
There is darkness everywhere.
And there is you.
And there is me.
And while I yearn for the fearlessness I once felt,
I have scars.
A laugh will turn into a sigh
As I remember the cold nights when I learned that
Stars give no warmth.
A burst of inspiration
Will turn to ice as the sounds of snapping wood fills my ears
As I pilot into a the face of a looming cliff.
And yet I wonder as I always have.
There you are.
That damned horizon.
And here I am.
Torn, longing, afraid.
I am broken.
But I wish to be whole.
A hammer in one hand
A flame in the other
Do I build or do I burn?
Sincerely,
Grant
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7/7/2013 9:59:50 AM
Posted: 3 years ago
At 7/7/2013 2:26:06 AM, ConservativePolitico wrote:
(Now the only question is... do I give this to her or not?)

That depends on a whole lotta things only you are privy to, my man.
If you're reading this, you're awesome and you should feel awesome.
Eitan_Zohar
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7/7/2013 11:04:09 AM
Posted: 3 years ago
This is awful. But she'll probably like it anyway. :)
"It is my ambition to say in ten sentences what others say in a whole book."
Buddamoose
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7/7/2013 11:30:12 AM
Posted: 3 years ago
Just sing her some Mr. Big, so much more effective
"Reality is an illusion created due to a lack of alcohol"
-Airmax1227

"You were the moon all this time, and he was always there to make you shine."

"Was he the sun?"

"No honey, he was the darkness"

-Kazekirion
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7/8/2013 1:16:19 AM
Posted: 3 years ago
tl;dr

the rythm of the poem was nonexistent, but overall still fairly good
"Reality is an illusion created due to a lack of alcohol"
-Airmax1227

"You were the moon all this time, and he was always there to make you shine."

"Was he the sun?"

"No honey, he was the darkness"

-Kazekirion
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7/8/2013 1:17:33 AM
Posted: 3 years ago
At 7/7/2013 2:26:06 AM, ConservativePolitico wrote:
(Now the only question is... do I give this to her or not?)

Really depends on the nature of your current relationship... and how you think she will react to it...
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7/8/2013 1:17:43 AM
Posted: 3 years ago
At 7/8/2013 1:14:43 AM, xXCryptoXx wrote:
YOLO.

'nuf said.

And by this I mean, just give it to her. I'm sure she'll appreciate it depending on how good of a girlfriend she is.
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7/8/2013 1:22:31 AM
Posted: 3 years ago
At 7/7/2013 2:26:06 AM, ConservativePolitico wrote:
(Now the only question is... do I give this to her or not?)

What do you want to achieve by giving her the poem? ==> X

Will the poem achieve [X]?

If yes ==> Give her the poem
If no ==> ~[give her the poem]
If you don't know ==> Give it to her anyway, unless it might cause you some kind of harm (which I can't see how it would).
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7/8/2013 9:21:00 AM
Posted: 3 years ago
Practical advise,

If you don't know her that well, the poem will probably creep her out. Now if you change the poem to be more of a compliment to some subtle things about her and make it light versus one about your internal struggle of approaching her, that might be nice.

The other thing is to focus more on building a relationship with her. Find something in common and build upon it.

On the other hand if you are a hopeless romantic like I was at a younger age, forget about any results and focus on the expression of yourself. That is how you will find someone compatible, by being yourself. You just have to resolve yourself to not take it too harshly if she has no interest or thinks the poem is corny.

How many times in the history of dating that a person finds out there expectations of the other person is completely different? For that reason, just be yourself and let the chips fall where they may.