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Ajabi
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6/26/2015 2:22:57 AM
Posted: 1 year ago
Eh, this is just the beginning. If its any good, I'll write more, otherwise I'll dump it.

No one ever sees.
The dreary eyed bees,
As they move to and fro,
With pretensions to Michelangelo,

Women with laced up dresses,
Vigorously brushed tresses,
Poised and high nosed,
A Wagner for their woes,

No worry for tea and scones,
No time for grins or moans,
An appetite for a day,
With never much to say,

The endless chitter-chatter,
Of all that's not the matter,
Still goes on and on and on,
The orchestra plays a song,
Defro
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6/26/2015 9:45:46 AM
Posted: 1 year ago
At 6/26/2015 2:22:57 AM, Ajabi wrote:

Here I fixed it:


No one ever sees.
The dreary eyed penises,
As they move to and fro,
With pretensions to Michelangelo's penis,

Women with laced up penises,
Vigorously brushed penises,
Poised and high nosed,
A Wagner for their penises,

No worry for tea and penises,
No time for grins or penises,
An appetite for a penis,
With never much to penis,

The endless penis,
Of all that's not the matter,
Still goes on and on and on,
The penis plays a song,
Ajabi
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6/26/2015 1:43:40 PM
Posted: 1 year ago
At 6/26/2015 9:45:46 AM, Defro wrote:
At 6/26/2015 2:22:57 AM, Ajabi wrote:

Here I fixed it:


No one ever sees.
The dreary eyed penises,
As they move to and fro,
With pretensions to Michelangelo's penis,

Women with laced up penises,
Vigorously brushed penises,
Poised and high nosed,
A Wagner for their penises,

No worry for tea and penises,
No time for grins or penises,
An appetite for a penis,
With never much to penis,

The endless penis,
Of all that's not the matter,
Still goes on and on and on,
The penis plays a song,

How...em....wonderful!
ShabShoral
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6/26/2015 2:15:12 PM
Posted: 1 year ago
At 6/26/2015 2:22:57 AM, Ajabi wrote:
Eh, this is just the beginning. If its any good, I'll write more, otherwise I'll dump it.

No one ever sees.
The dreary eyed bees,
As they move to and fro,
With pretensions to Michelangelo,

Women with laced up dresses,
Vigorously brushed tresses,
Poised and high nosed,
A Wagner for their woes,

No worry for tea and scones,
No time for grins or moans,
An appetite for a day,
With never much to say,

The endless chitter-chatter,
Of all that's not the matter,
Still goes on and on and on,
The orchestra plays a song,

I'm assuming it's about vanity and how the "high-society" act is a facade meant to hide the truly miserable nature of the socialites?

I don't really like rhyme schemes in general, but it works.
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6/27/2015 12:39:23 AM
Posted: 1 year ago
At 6/26/2015 2:15:12 PM, ShabShoral wrote:
At 6/26/2015 2:22:57 AM, Ajabi wrote:
Eh, this is just the beginning. If its any good, I'll write more, otherwise I'll dump it.

No one ever sees.
The dreary eyed bees,
As they move to and fro,
With pretensions to Michelangelo,

Women with laced up dresses,
Vigorously brushed tresses,
Poised and high nosed,
A Wagner for their woes,

No worry for tea and scones,
No time for grins or moans,
An appetite for a day,
With never much to say,

The endless chitter-chatter,
Of all that's not the matter,
Still goes on and on and on,
The orchestra plays a song,

I'm assuming it's about vanity and how the "high-society" act is a facade meant to hide the truly miserable nature of the socialites?

I don't really like rhyme schemes in general, but it works.

I thought most would not. The scheme and type of the poem is in copy of the style of T. S. Eliot. A rather modern and unconventional style.