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Mia_Iris
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7/27/2010 7:18:02 PM
Posted: 6 years ago
I wrote these two poems a decade ago as a college student. They are authentic and original.

Since I'm not a poet by trade or training, I had no knowledge of the mechanics or style of the poem (12 syllable sonnet) therefore could not have mentally procured it on my own.

http://followthepath-susl.blogspot.com...

What do you think of them? Could they infer divinity in any ways?
Obscuris vera involvens (Truth is enveloped in obscurity). Sola fide.
Mia_Iris
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7/27/2010 7:46:37 PM
Posted: 6 years ago
At 7/27/2010 7:43:11 PM, JustCallMeTarzan wrote:
You mean are your poems divinely inspired because they match a known poetic form?

You've got to be kidding me...

Did you even read the poems? I'm considering the subject matter of both poems and taking in consideration that I felt a presence go through me as I wrote the sonnet.
Obscuris vera involvens (Truth is enveloped in obscurity). Sola fide.
Mia_Iris
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7/27/2010 8:14:09 PM
Posted: 6 years ago
At 7/27/2010 7:51:11 PM, badger wrote:
if it was divinely inspired shouldn't it have been about throwing rocks at gays or something like that?

The real reference to biblical scriptures or buddhism is the onus of the path and allusion to mirrors.
Obscuris vera involvens (Truth is enveloped in obscurity). Sola fide.
Puck
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7/27/2010 8:48:24 PM
Posted: 6 years ago
Become a mormon. They tend to claim the same. :P

On a critical note your verse/structure is simplistic. That it's a well known mechanic for poetry simply indicates that it's easy to write poetry in that form. Nothing more.
Puck
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7/28/2010 2:18:07 AM
Posted: 6 years ago
At 7/27/2010 7:51:11 PM, badger wrote:
if it was divinely inspired shouldn't it have been about throwing rocks at gays or something like that?

Or even good poetry. :P
Zeitgeist
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7/28/2010 2:54:53 AM
Posted: 6 years ago
Poems are simply a means of producing an emotion more certain than prose. Half way between a picture and a paragraph they don't tell a thousand words but the do tell many more words in terms of creating a mind picture than pure prose.

They can also create an impression even when the words in isolation are meaningless. Charles Dodgson, better known to most as Lewis Carroll in his wonderful hyper-verse shows this to perfection :-

`Twas brillig, and the slithy toves
Did gyre and gimble in the wabe;
All mimsy were the borogoves,
And the mome raths outgrabe.

"Beware the Jabberwock, my son!
The jaws that bite, the claws that catch!
Beware the Jubjub bird, and shun
The frumious Bandersnatch!"

He took his vorpal sword in hand:
Long time the manxome foe he sought --
So rested he by the Tumtum tree,
And stood awhile in thought.

And, as in uffish thought he stood,
The Jabberwock, with eyes of flame,
Came whiffling through the tulgey wood,
And burbled as it came!

One, two! One, two! And through and through
The vorpal blade went snicker-snack!
He left it dead, and with its head
He went galumphing back.

"And, has thou slain the Jabberwock?
Come to my arms, my beamish boy!
O frabjous day! Callooh! Callay!'
He chortled in his joy.

`Twas brillig, and the slithy toves
Did gyre and gimble in the wabe;
All mimsy were the borogoves,
And the mome raths outgrabe. '

Poetry is a means to capture what words alone can not.

Now, about The Ballard of Eskimo Nell …..
Mia_Iris
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7/28/2010 3:19:33 AM
Posted: 6 years ago
At 7/28/2010 2:37:36 AM, PoeJoe wrote:
It's really not that hard to accidentally produce a sonnet... it's just not that complicated.

The point is that I didn't even know what a sonnet was when I wrote one. And the particular was that each line was exactly 12 syllables long which makes it harder to create such perfect symmetry.
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Mia_Iris
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7/28/2010 3:25:29 AM
Posted: 6 years ago
At 7/27/2010 8:48:24 PM, Puck wrote:
Become a mormon. They tend to claim the same. :P

On a critical note your verse/structure is simplistic. That it's a well known mechanic for poetry simply indicates that it's easy to write poetry in that form. Nothing more.

I agree but consider the fact that I didn't even know what a sonnet was when I wrote it and that each line is exactly 12 syllables long which makes it much harder to achieve.
Obscuris vera involvens (Truth is enveloped in obscurity). Sola fide.
Puck
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7/28/2010 3:35:06 AM
Posted: 6 years ago
At 7/28/2010 3:25:29 AM, Mia_Iris wrote:
each line is exactly 12 syllables long which makes it much harder to achieve.

I suggest you try counting those again ...
Puck
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7/28/2010 6:25:16 AM
Posted: 6 years ago
At 7/28/2010 6:04:59 AM, I-am-a-panda wrote:
I also presume you think Jesus' face on toast means divine intervention?

Reminds me of the Jesus illusion.

http://img89.imageshack.us...

Stare at the 4 dots for about a minute then at a blank white wall or piece of paper.
tBoonePickens
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7/28/2010 7:02:02 AM
Posted: 6 years ago
There once was a man from Nantucket
Whose d!ck was so long he could suck it.
And he said with a grin
As he wiped off his chin,
"If my ear were a c_nt, I would f_ck it!"
WOS
: At 10/3/2012 4:28:52 AM, Wallstreetatheist wrote:
: Without nothing existing, you couldn't have something.
brian_eggleston
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7/28/2010 7:26:24 AM
Posted: 6 years ago
I once met a ho in le gai Paris,
Whom I hoped might do it gratuit,
But when I asked for it for nowt,
She gave me a clout,
And said would she f-ck, f-ck me buckshee!

I just made that up - it must have been divine insipiration. I am doing God's work here folks!
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Zeitgeist
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7/28/2010 7:27:20 AM
Posted: 6 years ago
At 7/28/2010 7:02:02 AM, tBoonePickens wrote:
There once was a man from Nantucket
Whose d!ck was so long he could suck it.
And he said with a grin
As he wiped off his chin,
"If my ear were a c_nt, I would f_ck it!"

Oh dear.

There are so many to choose from!
innomen
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7/28/2010 7:34:50 AM
Posted: 6 years ago
At 7/27/2010 7:18:02 PM, Mia_Iris wrote:
I wrote these two poems a decade ago as a college student. They are authentic and original.

Since I'm not a poet by trade or training, I had no knowledge of the mechanics or style of the poem (12 syllable sonnet) therefore could not have mentally procured it on my own.

http://followthepath-susl.blogspot.com...

What do you think of them? Could they infer divinity in any ways?

Boy were you asking for it with this thread.
tBoonePickens
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7/28/2010 7:46:27 AM
Posted: 6 years ago
I didn't know that enigmatic means divinely inspired! So the Ridler is the good guy & Batman's really the bad guy? Now that's a divine revelation!
WOS
: At 10/3/2012 4:28:52 AM, Wallstreetatheist wrote:
: Without nothing existing, you couldn't have something.
Mia_Iris
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2/16/2011 2:20:29 PM
Posted: 5 years ago
At 7/28/2010 7:46:27 AM, tBoonePickens wrote:
I didn't know that enigmatic means divinely inspired! So the Ridler is the good guy & Batman's really the bad guy? Now that's a divine revelation!

No, but there's a possibility with the unknown to be known that divinity revealed what I did not know.

Why not? One can re-write the characters in a comic as easily as they turned Spiderman bad.
Obscuris vera involvens (Truth is enveloped in obscurity). Sola fide.
Mia_Iris
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2/16/2011 2:31:52 PM
Posted: 5 years ago
At 7/27/2010 7:43:11 PM, JustCallMeTarzan wrote:
You mean are your poems divinely inspired because they match a known poetic form?

You've got to be kidding me...

The poetic form makes it enigmatic, the secular subject matter in an omniscent tone makes it divine.
Obscuris vera involvens (Truth is enveloped in obscurity). Sola fide.