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10/21/2015 4:14:23 PM
Posted: 1 year ago
Scientists divide the atmosphere into four layers based on temperature difference. These layers are arranged from lowest to highest temperature which are troposphere, stratosphere (upper layer of air), Almizausver (cover East) and Iyrmosver (atmospheric emissions). The thickness of the atmosphere diminishing more with higher you go on the Earth's surface, and fade the outer layer of the atmosphere gradually in outer space, where it met the solar wind ( the solar wind a steady stream of charged particles from the sun). This essay will identify the main constituents of Earth's atmosphere and explain their importance for life on earth.

Firstly, the troposphere is the layer of the atmosphere adjacent to the surface of the Earth, which the layer we live in. This layer includes 75% of the total atmosphere, and most of weather changes, rain and snow happened in this layer. Scientists are predicting the weather for their study the troposphere. This layer also includes most of the water vapor and aerosols in the atmosphere. The jet stream blew in the upper part of this layer.

Decreasing temperature in the troposphere of about 6, 5 ° C higher you go up in 1000. Dependent decrease in temperature at the beginning of the Tropopause (lower interval), which represents the upper part of the Tropopause. Min troposphere is located at an altitude of 10 kilometers above the Arctic and Antarctic, and at an altitude of 15 km above the equator approximately. At the end of troposphere the air becomes too thin which not appropriate for life.

Usually the atmosphere near the Earth's surface warmer because the sun's rays that pass through the atmosphere heats the earth and water vapor. In turn, the earth heats the air which is adjacent to it. In some cases, especially during the night during the winter, the air which adjacent to Earth's surface is cooler than the air above it, increasing the temperature in the thin layer of the troposphere higher you go up, this anomaly is called the coup warming. The case of overturning warming continues until the rains or the wind comes to this layer.

The air is cool in the tropopause, where is composed of clouds of ice crystals. The coldest part of the troposphere is Alterbuboz which located above the equator, where air is raising the highest rate, so the temperature would drop to below the -80 ° C and the tropopause temperature over the poles increase by more than 30°C over the equator.

Stratosphere extends from the tropopause to 50 km above the earth's surface. The amount of moisture that reaches this layer of the atmosphere is very few, so the clouds are rare as well. Pilots prefer to fly into this layer to avoid the vagaries of the weather they encounter in the troposphere. The stratosphere is characterized by nearly steady temperature, but the temperature of the top layer of which increases with increasing altitude, where temperatures in the lower part is -55 ° C while temperatures in the upper part is -2 ° C only, and this part of the stratosphere named Alistratopoz (interval layer). This section contains most of the ozone gas in the atmosphere; Ozone heats the air because of absorption of ultraviolet radiation.

Almizausver extends from the end Alistratopoz to 80 km above the Earth's surface. The temperatures decrease in this layer by the altitude, whereas the temperatures in the upper portions of Almizausver to the lowest possible level in the atmosphere surrounding the Earth. The upper layer of this layer named Almizausver, and the temperature in this part over the poles fall to below -109 ° C during the summer. Scientists can see a tail of hot gases flow in this layer due to meteors, as it can be seen violence winds within the layer of almizausver. This wind is blowing from west to east in the winter from east to west in the summer.

Thermosphere (layer Iyrmosver), which is the highest layer in the atmosphere. It starts from the end of the end Almizuboz and continue to outer space. The air in this class characterized as a very light, as the 99, 99% of the atmosphere lies below it. Different chemical composition of air in this layer of the chemical composition of the rest of the constituent layers of the atmosphere; in the lower parts of the layer Iyrmosver, shatter most oxygen molecules to oxygen atoms and the upper parts contain mainly hydrogen and helium.

The Iyrmosver layer is facing the sun directly, working to heat the light air to a very high degree. The temperature jumps quickly to 600 ° C at an altitude of 200 km above the Earth's surface. In addition, the solar wind adds an additional amount of radiation and particles to the Iyrmosver which make the air becomes hotter. The degree of the temperature goes to more than 2000 ° C at an altitude of 400 km above the Earth's surface.

However, when the Sunlight and other radiation which comes from other global sources hit the Iyrmosver, some of the molecules and atoms are shipped with electricity. The electrically charged atoms called ions and these ions are taking place in the lower parts of the Altheromusavyr .This layer plays a major role in the BR long-term and this layer is reverse electromagnetic waves to the ground instead of proliferation in space.
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10/22/2015 5:52:53 AM
Posted: 1 year ago
At 10/21/2015 11:58:46 PM, dee-em wrote:
If you copy and paste other peoples work without attribution, that is plagiarism:

http://www.ukessays.com...

That's my essay.
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10/22/2015 9:13:52 AM
Posted: 1 year ago
At 10/22/2015 5:52:53 AM, famousdebater wrote:
At 10/21/2015 11:58:46 PM, dee-em wrote:
If you copy and paste other peoples work without attribution, that is plagiarism:

http://www.ukessays.com...

That's my essay.

Really? Well, that's pretty good for a 13-year old.

What exactly would you like us to comment on with regard to your science essay? The factual accuracy? The writing style?

From memory, the format of a science essay is a Title, an Introduction/Synopsis where you lay out your your main ideas and your purpose, the Body where you expand on your ideas and flesh them out, and then a Conclusion where you summarise your arguments/ideas. You don't have a Title or a recognizable Conclusion but other than that it's a reasonable job. (I haven't checked the factual content).
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10/22/2015 2:37:47 PM
Posted: 1 year ago
At 10/22/2015 9:13:52 AM, dee-em wrote:
At 10/22/2015 5:52:53 AM, famousdebater wrote:
At 10/21/2015 11:58:46 PM, dee-em wrote:
If you copy and paste other peoples work without attribution, that is plagiarism:

http://www.ukessays.com...

That's my essay.

Really? Well, that's pretty good for a 13-year old.

What exactly would you like us to comment on with regard to your science essay? The factual accuracy? The writing style?

From memory, the format of a science essay is a Title, an Introduction/Synopsis where you lay out your your main ideas and your purpose, the Body where you expand on your ideas and flesh them out, and then a Conclusion where you summarise your arguments/ideas. You don't have a Title or a recognizable Conclusion but other than that it's a reasonable job. (I haven't checked the factual content).

I think that the factual content is okay. What I'm looking for is comments and suggestions on how to improve.
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10/22/2015 4:10:49 PM
Posted: 1 year ago
At 10/21/2015 4:14:23 PM, famousdebater wrote:
Scientists divide the atmosphere into four layers based on temperature difference. These layers are arranged from lowest to highest temperature which are troposphere, stratosphere (upper layer of air), Almizausver (cover East) and Iyrmosver (atmospheric emissions). The thickness of the atmosphere diminishes more the higher you go, and fades to the outer layer of the atmosphere gradually in outer space, where it meets the solar wind. The solar wind is a steady stream of charged particles from the sun. This essay will identify the main constituents of Earth's atmosphere and explain their importance for life on earth. Note: You never really do explain their importance for life on earth. You describe them fairly well, but never move on to why they are important. If you don't explain why they are important then you shouldn't say that you will in your opening paragraph.

Firstly, the troposphere is the layer of the atmosphere adjacent to the surface of the Earth, which is the layer we live in. This layer includes 75% of the total atmosphere, and most of the weather changes, such as rain and snow happen in this layer. Scientists are predicting the weather for their study the troposphere. This layer also includes most of the water vapor and aerosols in the atmosphere. The jet stream is located in the upper part of this layer.

Decreasing temperature in the troposphere of about 6, 5 ° C higher you go up in 1000. Dependent decrease in temperature at the beginning of the Tropopause (lower interval), which represents the upper part of the Tropopause. Min troposphere is located at an altitude of 10 kilometers above the Arctic and Antarctic, and at an altitude of 15 km above the equator approximately. At the end of troposphere the air becomes too thin which not appropriate for life. This whole paragraph needs re-written. I don't know what you are trying to say.

Usually the atmosphere near the Earth's surface is warmer because the sun's rays that pass through the atmosphere heats the earth and water vapor. In turn, the earth heats the air which is adjacent to it. In some cases, especially during the night during the winter, the air which is adjacent to the Earth's surface is cooler than the air above it, increasing the temperature in the thin layer of the troposphere higher you go up. This anomaly is called the coup warming. The case of overturning warming continues until rain or wind come to this layer.

The air is cool in the tropopause, where it is composed of clouds of ice crystals. The coldest part of the troposphere is Alterbuboz which is located above the equator, where air is rising at the highest rate. So the temperature would drop to below the -80 ° C and the tropopause temperature over the poles increase by more than 30°C over the equator. This last sentence needs re-written. I don't know what you are trying to say.

The Stratosphere extends from the tropopause to 50 km above the earth's surface. The amount of moisture that reaches this layer of the atmosphere is very small, so clouds are rare. Pilots prefer to fly into this layer to avoid the vagaries of the weather they encounter in the troposphere. The stratosphere is characterized by nearly steady temperature, but the temperature of the top layer of which increases with increasing altitude, where temperatures in the lower part is -55 ° C while temperatures in the upper part is -2 ° C only, and this part of the stratosphere named Alistratopoz (interval layer). The previous sentence needs rewritten. It is unclear. This section contains most of the ozone gas in the atmosphere; Ozone heats the air because of absorption of ultraviolet radiation.

Almizausver extends from the end Alistratopoz to 80 km above the Earth's surface. The temperatures decrease in this layer by the altitude, whereas the temperatures in the upper portions of Almizausver are the lowest possible level in the atmosphere surrounding the Earth. The upper layer of this layer is named Almizausver, and the temperature in this part over the poles falls to below -109 ° C during the summer. Scientists can see a tail of hot gases flow in this layer due to meteors, as it can be seen violence winds within the layer of almizausver. The previous sentence needs rewritten, it is unclear. This wind in this layer is blowing from west to east in the winter from east to west in the summer.

The Thermosphere (layer Iyrmosver), is the highest layer in the atmosphere. It starts from the end of the end Almizuboz and continues to outer space. The air in this class is characterized as very light, as 99, 99% of the atmosphere lies below it. There is a different chemical composition of air in this layer compared to the chemical composition of the rest of the constituent layers of the atmosphere. In the lower parts of the layer Iyrmosver, shatters most oxygen molecules into oxygen atoms and the upper parts contain mainly hydrogen and helium.

The Iyrmosver layer is facing the sun directly, working to heat the light air to a very high degree. The temperature jumps quickly to 600 ° C at an altitude of 200 km above the Earth's surface. In addition, the solar wind adds an additional amount of radiation and particles to the Iyrmosver which makes the air become hotter. The degree of the temperature goes to more than 2000 ° C at an altitude of 400 km above the Earth's surface.

However, when Sunlight and other radiation which comes from global sources hits the Iyrmosver, some of the molecules and atoms become charged with electricity. The electrically charged atoms are called ions and these ions are occurring in the lower parts of the Altheromusavyr .This layer plays a major role in the BR long-term and this layer is reverse electromagnetic waves to the ground instead of proliferation in space. This last sentence needs re-written, it is unclear.

There is not really a conclusion or summary. You should add a paragraph for that. Perhaps you could also talk more about the importance of each of the layers to life on earth.

I proofread it for grammar and spelling, and made a couple suggestions. My notes are in bold. Can't guarantee I caught it all, but certainly most. I didn't fact-check or edit for content because that is sort of your own responsibility when writing an essay. It could still be better grammatically, and it could use improvements to the transitions and paragraph structure, but I'd need to pretty much re-write it to fix that. Consider improving those areas on your own before submission. If you are 13 like someone else mentioned you should have a pretty good essay for your age after making the corrections.
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10/22/2015 5:13:27 PM
Posted: 1 year ago
At 10/22/2015 4:10:49 PM, JMcKinley wrote:
At 10/21/2015 4:14:23 PM, famousdebater wrote:
Scientists divide the atmosphere into four layers based on temperature difference. These layers are arranged from lowest to highest temperature which are troposphere, stratosphere (upper layer of air), Almizausver (cover East) and Iyrmosver (atmospheric emissions). The thickness of the atmosphere diminishes more the higher you go, and fades to the outer layer of the atmosphere gradually in outer space, where it meets the solar wind. The solar wind is a steady stream of charged particles from the sun. This essay will identify the main constituents of Earth's atmosphere and explain their importance for life on earth. Note: You never really do explain their importance for life on earth. You describe them fairly well, but never move on to why they are important. If you don't explain why they are important then you shouldn't say that you will in your opening paragraph.

Firstly, the troposphere is the layer of the atmosphere adjacent to the surface of the Earth, which is the layer we live in. This layer includes 75% of the total atmosphere, and most of the weather changes, such as rain and snow happen in this layer. Scientists are predicting the weather for their study the troposphere. This layer also includes most of the water vapor and aerosols in the atmosphere. The jet stream is located in the upper part of this layer.

Decreasing temperature in the troposphere of about 6, 5 ° C higher you go up in 1000. Dependent decrease in temperature at the beginning of the Tropopause (lower interval), which represents the upper part of the Tropopause. Min troposphere is located at an altitude of 10 kilometers above the Arctic and Antarctic, and at an altitude of 15 km above the equator approximately. At the end of troposphere the air becomes too thin which not appropriate for life. This whole paragraph needs re-written. I don't know what you are trying to say.

Usually the atmosphere near the Earth's surface is warmer because the sun's rays that pass through the atmosphere heats the earth and water vapor. In turn, the earth heats the air which is adjacent to it. In some cases, especially during the night during the winter, the air which is adjacent to the Earth's surface is cooler than the air above it, increasing the temperature in the thin layer of the troposphere higher you go up. This anomaly is called the coup warming. The case of overturning warming continues until rain or wind come to this layer.

The air is cool in the tropopause, where it is composed of clouds of ice crystals. The coldest part of the troposphere is Alterbuboz which is located above the equator, where air is rising at the highest rate. So the temperature would drop to below the -80 ° C and the tropopause temperature over the poles increase by more than 30°C over the equator. This last sentence needs re-written. I don't know what you are trying to say.

The Stratosphere extends from the tropopause to 50 km above the earth's surface. The amount of moisture that reaches this layer of the atmosphere is very small, so clouds are rare. Pilots prefer to fly into this layer to avoid the vagaries of the weather they encounter in the troposphere. The stratosphere is characterized by nearly steady temperature, but the temperature of the top layer of which increases with increasing altitude, where temperatures in the lower part is -55 ° C while temperatures in the upper part is -2 ° C only, and this part of the stratosphere named Alistratopoz (interval layer). The previous sentence needs rewritten. It is unclear. This section contains most of the ozone gas in the atmosphere; Ozone heats the air because of absorption of ultraviolet radiation.

Almizausver extends from the end Alistratopoz to 80 km above the Earth's surface. The temperatures decrease in this layer by the altitude, whereas the temperatures in the upper portions of Almizausver are the lowest possible level in the atmosphere surrounding the Earth. The upper layer of this layer is named Almizausver, and the temperature in this part over the poles falls to below -109 ° C during the summer. Scientists can see a tail of hot gases flow in this layer due to meteors, as it can be seen violence winds within the layer of almizausver. The previous sentence needs rewritten, it is unclear. This wind in this layer is blowing from west to east in the winter from east to west in the summer.

The Thermosphere (layer Iyrmosver), is the highest layer in the atmosphere. It starts from the end of the end Almizuboz and continues to outer space. The air in this class is characterized as very light, as 99, 99% of the atmosphere lies below it. There is a different chemical composition of air in this layer compared to the chemical composition of the rest of the constituent layers of the atmosphere. In the lower parts of the layer Iyrmosver, shatters most oxygen molecules into oxygen atoms and the upper parts contain mainly hydrogen and helium.

The Iyrmosver layer is facing the sun directly, working to heat the light air to a very high degree. The temperature jumps quickly to 600 ° C at an altitude of 200 km above the Earth's surface. In addition, the solar wind adds an additional amount of radiation and particles to the Iyrmosver which makes the air become hotter. The degree of the temperature goes to more than 2000 ° C at an altitude of 400 km above the Earth's surface.

However, when Sunlight and other radiation which comes from global sources hits the Iyrmosver, some of the molecules and atoms become charged with electricity. The electrically charged atoms are called ions and these ions are occurring in the lower parts of the Altheromusavyr .This layer plays a major role in the BR long-term and this layer is reverse electromagnetic waves to the ground instead of proliferation in space. This last sentence needs re-written, it is unclear.

There is not really a conclusion or summary. You should add a paragraph for that. Perhaps you could also talk more about the importance of each of the layers to life on earth.

I proofread it for grammar and spelling, and made a couple suggestions. My notes are in bold. Can't guarantee I caught it all, but certainly most. I didn't fact-check or edit for content because that is sort of your own responsibility when writing an essay. It could still be better grammatically, and it could use improvements to the transitions and paragraph structure, but I'd need to pretty much re-write it to fix that. Consider improving those areas on your own before submission. If you are 13 like someone else mentioned you should have a pretty good essay for your age after making the corrections.

Thanks for the suggestions, I will be making changes. I really appreciate that by the way.
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10/22/2015 5:37:46 PM
Posted: 1 year ago
At 10/22/2015 5:13:27 PM, famousdebater wrote:

Thanks for the suggestions, I will be making changes. I really appreciate that by the way.

No problem.

Also one more thing:

Scientists are predicting the weather for their study of the troposphere.